Thursday, August 5, 2010

Gamora - Him & His Big Mouth - Simon McDonald

1. The Avengers Mansion is in ruins; the bodies of various Avengers are strewn about, unconscious, half-buried in rubble. Two women remain standing. Black Widow, with two pistols aimed squarely at her foe; Gamora, sword in her band. Both appear bruised and battered, but determined to take each other out.

CAPTION
[BLACK WIDOW]
I'm going to kill him for this.


2. Flashback Sequence Begins. Inside the Avengers mansion. The Avengers are sitting around a table. Spider-Man is seated between Black Widow and Gamora; her sword is sheathed behind her back. 

SPIDER-MAN
I'm just sayin' !
I think one of you - and I'm lookin' at you, Gammy, 'cause you're new here...
... I think one of you need a new slogan.


3. On Black Widow; bored. Sick to death of Spidey's incessant chatter.

SPIDER-MAN
[off panel]
'Cause right now, we've got the world's most dangerous woman sitting on my left...


4. On Gamora, eyes bulging at this revelation.

SPIDER-MAN
[off panel]
And on my right, we've got the universe's most dangerous woman!


5. On Spidey, gesticulating. He's now got a notepad in his hand.

SPIDER-MAN
So basically we've got two of the same thing on the team!
Two Most Dangerous Women!
So I've come up with a list of new slogans.
Next time we're taking on Doctor Doom, why don't you give one of these a whirl? I've got - -


6. Gamora is standing, angry, sword unsheathed, aimed squarely at Black Widow. Spidey's stunned, in the midst of falling off his chair.

GAMORA (1)
You're this world's most dangerous woman?
You?

SPIDER-MAN
Whoa, whoa, whoa - -

GAMORA (2)
We shall see!

7. Flashback Sequence Ends. Black Widow is firing her pistols at Gamora, who deflects the bullets easily with her sword.

 CAPTION
[BLACK WIDOW]
Him and his big mouth.

 END.

5 comments:

  1. haha That was cool. Spidey and his big mouth-- always getting himself, or someone else, in trouble. Love it!

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  2. That's great, Simon, a really nice idea, perfectly excuted in one page.

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  3. Simon, I absolutely love this idea, and you've nailed Spidey in this one. He's constant, he's annoying, he's hilarious. Very well played.

    The entire set up works, the flash back is quality, I just wonder what happens next...

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  4. Haha, loved this! Timely too, with all the complaining people have been doing about Spidey's portrayal in New Avengers of late.

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  5. Simon, you nailed Spidey there. Well done. A nice little fun piece.

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