Wednesday, September 8, 2010

Daredevil - His Worst Enemy - Max Barnard

The Premise: What's Daredevil's biggest weakness? His lack of sight? No, not at all. It's something much less utilised in his stories, mostly because Daredevil is known to be a *shudder* serious title. This page is some unknown amount of pages into a larger storyline, because who needs a page 1 all the time? (answer: me)

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Page X - 8 Panels

1-- Daredevil, peering stealthily around a street corner at 3 thugs.

NARRATION/DAREDEVIL - I don't like this. Jimmy The Tooth said that there would be four thugs at the drop-off point. Three goons and the new 'protection'. Why can I only sense the goons?


2-- A blurred shape collides with Daredevil, sending him towards the ground.

SPEECH BUBBLE/DAREDEVIL - WHUFF!

NARRATION/DAREDEVIL - What? Where did that come from?


3-- Close-up on Daredevil lying on the street as he takes a hit to the face from the left. It's important that we still don't see WHAT is hitting him, in an attempt to keep the mystery up.

SFX - RYNK!

NARRATION/DAREDEVIL - I can't even tell if something's hitting me.


4-- Same as the previous panel's set-up, except Daredevil's face is being hit in the other direction with two rapid hits.

SFX - SIMN! MCK!

NARRATION/DAREDEVIL - But I can feel every blow coursing through my body.


5-- Continuing the close-up face-punching, back to a hit from the left. Daredevil now has blood trickling out of his nose, mouth, and from somewhere under his mask.

SFX - ROLHSST!

NARRATION/DAREDEVIL - NNGH! What's with the noises I'm hearing?


6-- Now Daredevil's taking a hit to the chin.

SFX - MATTADUAR!

NARRATION/DAREDEVIL - And why does it hurt MORE when I'm thinking?


7-- In the final part of this sequence, Daredevil is no longer being punched, and has a look of abject horror upon his face.

NARRATION/DAREDEVIL - ...No

SPEECH BUBBLE/DAREDEVIL - ..... N-no!


8-- Finally we get to see his assailant, looming over DD's beaten body. It is a giant Thought Balloon, with two of the edges of the balloon stretched out into huge fists. Behind it is a huge lightning strike

SFX/LIGHTNING BOLT - DUNDUNDUUUUUUUUN!

THOUGHT BALLOON/THOUGHT BALLOON - What's the matter DD, can you not sense..... THE THOUGHT BALLOON?!

4 comments:

  1. I'm just gonna throw in a:

    SFX: DANC!!

    ... into the fray :-)

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  2. I was tempted to continue that sequence just to fit in every damn name I could.

    ... I totally should have!

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  3. haha You could have done a montage splash panel :-)

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  4. Max - um....wow? Love the sound effects, I'm going to steal mine and use it as often as I can. Even just saying it every now and then ha.

    You've crafted such a post-modern take on what it means to write and think, and think about writing. Just so erudite, really.

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