Tuesday, September 7, 2010

Daredevil - The Weight - Rol Hirst

Panel One.

A completely black panel.

CAP (DD): I wake to darkness.

CAP (DD): The same as any other day.

Panel Two.

Flashback. Young Matt Murdoch rushes to push the blind man out of the way of an oncoming chemical truck.

CAP (DD): When I was 12 years old, an accident left me blind… yet enhanced my other senses greatly. It also gifted me with a special sixth ‘radar’ sense that allows me to see better than most sighted people.

Panel Three.

Another completely black panel.

CAP (DD): I still wake to darkness every day.

CAP (DD): Today, though, is different…

Panel Four.

Another black panel – but this time we see the silhouette of DD’s face at the bottom and concentric ‘radar sense’ circles rising up through the darkness.

CAP (DD): Not only can’t I see, but I can’t move either. I can hardly even catch a breath…

CAP (DD): …and when I do, my other senses overload. The rank smell of sweat and sour cologne. The pounding beat of a thunderous drum. The enormous weight pressing down like I’ve been buried alive…

Panel Five.

Flashback. Daredevil is fighting the Kingpin. Stood like a boxer, he's laying into the Kingpin with punch after punch after punch, desperate to knock him out. The Kingpin takes every punch... but he might just be weakening.

CAP (DD): I try to work out where I am. How I got here. What was the last thing I…

Panel Six.

Out of flashback. Now we see exactly where DD is – he’s fighting his way out from under the Kingpin’s unconscious body. Having knocked Fisk out, the Kingpin has fallen on DD, knocking Matt out in turn and half-smothering him in the process. In this panel he struggles to free himself from underneath his enormous enemy.

DD: Get… off… me!

CAP (DD): Foggy’s never gonna let me live this down.


  1. I'll be the first to admit this isn't very good. I love DD and I did want to write something more substantial this week, but events conspired against me. I feel almost dirty for the cheap gag. Sorry.

  2. Rol, you've played for the slapstick. I'm shocked, didn't know you had it in you to pander to the lowest common denominator. Ha.

  3. Hey, at least I resisted the fart gag!

  4. A nice "What If?" gag story. Though this does add to a common misconeption- Kingpin is 400 pounds of muscle not fat!


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