Sunday, November 28, 2010

The Profile - Tell - Danial Carroll


PANEL 1. Close-up of The Profile, holding a hand of cards close to his face.

CAPTION:
So this is how I make an income.


PANEL 2. We see the rest of the poker-table's players with various descriptive writing surrounding them. It doesn’t matter what it says, as long as the closest and most pronounced of each, mention their poker status--words such as "bluffing", "two pair", and "one card off a straight" etc.

CAPTION:
No surprise really.

CAPTION:
With a gift such like mine, it's easy money.


PANEL 3. The Profile is being thrown out a back door into a dark alleyway.

CAPTION:
However, I learned early on in my career--


PANEL 4. Close-up of The Profile being punched in the face by a large, suit-cuffed fist. His trademark red glasses are cracked from the blow.

CAPTION:
--that to avoid taking one to the face--


PANEL 5. From The Profile's POV we see that he has a royal flush.

CAPTION:
--you sometimes have to take one on the chin.

PROFILE (OP):
I fold.

5 comments:

  1. Nice! not only is the scripting solid but the little attentions to detail on the character are spot on, most of all his desperate want to not get hit in the face.

    A fine achievement for a single page. you've set the bar well

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  2. I really like this a lot. I don't have much else to add other than that it appears to be an entire summation of the character in one page - pretty impressive!

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  3. Thanks, guys. And Paul, that was actually my aim in writing this. I wanted to give a very generalised view of him so that newcomers might get a feel for the character :)

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  4. It definitely came across, and as someone who never heard of him before reading his introduction on the blog here, it was incredibly helpful!

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  5. Nice. Really liked the script in this one, Danial, particularly the last couple of panels.

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