Tuesday, November 30, 2010

The Profile - Visualise - Max Barnard

The Premise: So... The Profile... The visualisation of his powers is pretty similar to Amadeus Cho's, yes? I want to do something with that. For the setting, set your mind back to Dark Reign, when The Profile was used to help hunt Moon Knight. Except now he's giving information to Osborn about some other particular nuisances in his side.

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Page 1 - 6 Panels

1-- The Profile is sitting in an interrogation room (plain walls, small table and two chairs at opposite ends, that sort of dealio.). Norman Osborn is entering the room via a small door directly behind him.

SPEECH BUBBLE/NORMAN OSBORN - So, "Profile", I understand that you have a particular talent for understanding individuals, yes?

SPEECH BUBBLE/THE PROFILE - So I'm told. I'm also told that you require my services to deal with some nuisance.


2-- Norman is now beside The Profile, placing some files open on the desk in front of him. The Profile is looking up at Norman's face. Around Norman's head are Profile's visualisations, saying things such as "HATES BEING CALLED GOBBIE", "SUPERIORITY COMPLEX", "FEARS GOING BALD" and "EROTIC SPIDER-MAN FIXATION", dependant on how much you can fit in.

SPEECH BUBBLE/THE PROFILE - heh.

SPEECH BUBBLE/NORMAN OSBORN - Correct. These two, the 'god' Hercules and his sidekick brat Mr. Cho have been causing me no end of minor grievances, and I want you to tell me how to best return the favour with, shall we say, minimal effort.


3-- The Profile is looking down at the files photos on the desk as Osborn looks on.

SPEECH BUBBLE/THE PROFILE - Well Hercules is a cinch. Just exploit his feelings of masculinity, maybe take pokes at him for the young boy sidekick, the whole caped crusader angle. As for Cho... Well... Um...

SPEECH BUBBLE/NORMAN OSBORN - Yes?


4-- The Profile has gotten up and is throwing the files off the side of the table in a huff, with only the Amadeus Cho file photo remaining (whether this is evident or not really isn't that important, our readers will figure it out, they're smart people). Norman Osborn I leaning slightly away, sneering in a combination of mild shock and disgust, as is his way.

SPEECH BUBBLE/THE PROFILE - I CAN'T WORK UNDER THESE CONDITIONS! CALL ME AGAIN WHEN YOU WANT ME TO DEAL WITH SOMEONE LESS... LESS... RARGH!


5-- The Profile has left the room, slamming the door behind him. Norman Osborn is leaning over the desk and looking at the picture of Cho left on the desk.

SPEECH BUBBLE/NORMAN OSBORN - Well... I wonder...


6-- We now show what The Profile was seeing when he was looking at Cho's picture on the desk earlier (tint the panel red to make it clear that it's being viewed through his sunglasses). Around Cho's mugshot are TONS of his trademark equations (which as we know are usually invisible to the naked eye) and a single line of text in The Profile's powers' style, saying "FAIL. RETRY/ABORT?"

CAPTION/NORMAN OSBORN - ... Just what did he see to make him do *that*.

7 comments:

  1. Niiiice, I really like this, Max. Cool idea and well executed.

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  2. Great concept and a very apt title. He had a freak-out when trying to profile Moon Knight for Osborn as well, so if this happened at the same time, it would be rather stressful for the guy :)

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  3. Woah...that was an interesting ending. But considering how unlikeable he's suppose to be, I can't help but enjoy reading him come up against someone that's kind of like his kryptonite or what have you.

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  4. @Danial I'm tempted to see how many more characters I can have Profile freak-out about in front of Osborn. I reckon there's at least a dozen

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  5. Hot damn Max, this is AWESOME! LIttle known fact, but I'm a HUGE Norman fan, and you have made him sinister and laughable at the same time. "Hates being called gobbie" is brilliant.

    Also, really interesting hook with Profile/Cho. Two big thumbs up from me my man. GREAT work!

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  6. Max, loved it. I'm glad I didn't read this before writing my own strip because we're thinking very much along the same lines this week.

    In fact, when you say "I'm tempted to see how many more characters I can have Profile freak-out about"... I'll have the answer for you shortly.

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  7. Great idea, Max. Such a clever team-up/face-off, I would love to see more.

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