Monday, December 6, 2010

Faiza Hussain - Hail - Ben Rosenthal

With apologies to all British people everywhere.


1. Close up of Faiza, sweat on her face as she runs.

CAPTION
This isn’t what I signed up for.


2. A wider shot, showing the torso of Faiza as she runs. We can see, vaguely, figures behind her. She is running from these figures.

CAPTION
I’m a doctor first. I just want to help people. My abilities help me do that.


3. A close up of Excalibur, hanging from Faiza’s belt.

CAPTION
As does this thing. Right now though...


4. A birds’ eye point of view, with Faiza running ahead of a large crowd of people.

CAPTION
It’s not helping a hell of a lot.

CROWD (large font, as they are chanting)
HAIL, THE TRUE MONARCH! HAIL EXCALIBUR!


5. Same framing as panel one. Faiza looks horrified at the chant.

FAIZA
Oh bollocks.

3 comments:

  1. I actually didn't catch the little apology note until after I'd read through the script, and I think that made the bit even funnier. :-)

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  2. Ha.

    Could she be the new Queen of Hearts?

    What would Kate say?

    The only thing I'd change would be the final word in the description of panel 4. 'Idiots' seems far more apt.

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  3. New "Queen of Hearts" - At first I thought you might be referencing some superheroine I wasn't aware of, but even still, it's an interesting idea to consider.

    If something like that played out, however, I'd say it would definitely need to include Jack of Hearts somehow. If only because of the names.

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