Sunday, December 12, 2010

Gambit - Années Passées - Max Barnard

Gambit - Années Passées - Max Barnard

A preamble: They use this title as a way of saying "years gone by", or so I'm told. And that's kinda where the focus is here. This script is a weird one though. It turned out how I wanted despite not allowing me to use all the research I had. Just shows that you can try and fit stuff in, but if it doesn't feel natural.... Well... Just don't.

So anyway, here we are with a story set in the current marvel universe, where Gambit is travelling with X-23 as she tries to forge her own path in the world.


Page 1 - 8 Panels

1-- X-23 and Gambit are sitting around a small fire at night, surrounded entirely by darkness. With them is Gambit's motorcycle and some various camping equipment (sleeping bags, pans and such) laid out.

SPEECH BUBBLE/GAMBIT - So I'm thinkin', maybe we don't go too far east. There ain't nothing much to see that way now.

SPEECH BUBBLE/X-23 - ......

SPEECH BUBBLE/GAMBIT - Vous bien? Laura?

2-- X-23 is jabbing absent-mindedly with a stick at the fire, with a blank expression on her face.

SPEECH BUBBLE/X-23 - Don't... Don't you have a home? A place you belong to. So... Why aren't you there?

3-- Close-up on Gambit as he looks surprised at X-23's statement.

4-- Another close-up of Gambit as he looks down and smiles to himself wistfully.

SPEECH BUBBLE/GAMBIT - Heh, that's what I was just talkin' about, girl. See, there's not many there that would welcome ol' me in New Orleans, and I got no desire to return there myself.

5-- X-23 is leaning forward as Gambit speaks, paying rapt attention as he continues to just look on.

SPEECH BUBBLE/GAMBIT - I miss some of the times, sure, and ALL the food (you know we got about a million dishes? Good stuff) but that's the thing about places you come from, cherí. They all look a lot better in the past than if you were to go back there.

6-- Gambit is now leaning back, ready to lie on the ground.

SPEECH BUBBLE/GAMBIT - New Orleans, she not the same place anymore. Been through a real wringer. And those like me, who speak all the old cajun, we on the way out.

7-- Gambit is now lying on the ground, looking up at the night sky (whether we can see that or not is largely unimportant, mind you. As long as he's lying on his back looking up it should have the right feel to it). X-23 is getting her sleeping bag and preparing to sleep herself now too.

SPEECH BUBBLE/GAMBIT - And me? I don't even sound the same as I did back then. You know more than anyone that we change over time, and usually for the better. And so the places we're at home change with us.

8-- Both characters are now lying down as the fire has dimmed, illuminating them far less than before.

SPEECH BUBBLE/GAMBIT - Now we got some ground to cover tomorrow, so you sleep well now, okay?

SPEECH BUBBLE/X-23 - Okay. And... Remy?


SPEECH BUBBLE/X-23 - Thank you... For coming with me.

SPEECH BUBBLE/GAMBIT - Think nothing of it, cherí. Fais do-do.


  1. Gambit said 'do-do', AHAHAHA! Just kidding.

    This is a weirdly sweet page, Gambit as a metaphor for change and positivity. I can't help but think he's eventually going to sleep with her but at least you get the idea it'll be nice and slow love...and I'm glad you didn't script that page, ha.

    Max - this is something different and while possibly too wordy it is effective and understated - you're out of your wheelhouse and showing promise.

  2. You captured the voice of Gambit here perfectly Max! Managed to get his 'sound' right without over-doing the 'mon frere' and 'mon amie' catchphrases. As a result, Gambit seems much more of a realistic character, instead of the cartoony one we say in the 90's. That in itself deserves acclaim.

    Sure, it's wordy, but we're all allowed to do that once in a while.

  3. Nice work, Max. I really liked this. Gambit did always have a thing for the younger girls ;)

    My only concern was the use of brackets in panel five's dialogue. Do they get used in speech bubbles? In my limited experience, I think a double-dash would be used instead.

  4. @danial it's used a fair bit in modern stories as a way of noting a lower inflection or aside in a statement. I'd cite Dan Slott's use of it in Mighty Avengers as a decent example, but then I cite that book for any unusual writing thing so perhaps i need to think of another example


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