Saturday, December 25, 2010

Santa Claus - Dressed For The Occasion - Danial Carroll


PAGE ONE (seven panels)


PANEL 1. Marc Spector and his close friends are sitting in the living room of his expensive penthouse apartment, all in high spirits. Jean-Paul and Rob are snuggling up on one sofa, Crawley is laying back on a recliner, and Marlene is on the adjacent sofa from which Marc has just risen. In the background is a large Christmas tree.

MARC:
I'll be right back. This egg nog is going right through me.


PANEL 2. Side view of Marc washing his hands in the bathroom sink.

KHONSHU (OP):
It's a nice setup you've got out there, Killer.

MARC:
I'm pretty sure you weren't invited.

KHONSHU (OP):
Don't be like that...


PANEL 3. Marc is looking in the mirror at Khonshu standing behind him, looking like Santa.

KHONSHU:
... I even dressed for the occasion.

MARC:
Can't you just leave me alone for this one day?


PANEL 4. Marc has turned around and is facing Santa-Khonshu.

KHONSHU:
Why do you even care? You don't believe in that stuff.

MARC:
But they do.

MARC:
Have you seen how happy they all are out there?

MARC:
I do it for them.


PANEL 5. Marc is walking past Santa-Khonshu towards the door.

MARC:
Now if you don't mind, I'd like to get back to them.

KHONSHU:
But I haven't given you your present yet.


PANEL 6. Close up of Marc's hand, reaching for the door-knob.

MARC (OP):
Whatever it is, I doubt I'd want it.


PANEL 7. Marc is standing alone in the bathroom. He is in shock, having just pulled the door off its hinges.

SFX:
KRAK

KHONSHU (OP):
Oh, I think you will.


[NOTE: For those who don't know, Marc Spector (aka Moon Knight) once had powers, but they were taken from him for not doing Khonshu's bidding... so I thought I'd give them back! :P]

3 comments:

  1. Nice reveal Danial. Haven't read much Moon Knight - is it in Khonshu's character to dress up like Santa, or is he a personality of Marcs?

    The one thing I found myself thinking at the end is "What's the catch?", a great hook to end a page on.

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  2. It changes with every series, but in my fav one, he appeared as anything that would get a rise out of Marc... and there's always a catch :)

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  3. I think Santa Khonshu is a lot more fun than the po-faced Khonshu we often see in MK. Of course, it does somehow indicate that Spector has gone even further off the deep end when Santa is showing up dressed as Father Christmas.

    Well played, Danial.

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