Sunday, January 23, 2011

Doctor Strange - Appearances Can Be Deceiving - Danial Carroll

(five panels)


PANEL 1. Close up of Namor, looking unimpressed as usual.

NAMOR:
You called me here for that?


PANEL 2. Mid-shot of Reed Richards, Doctor Strange, and Tony Stark, all looking down at something in front of them.

STRANGE:
You of all people should know that appearances can be deceiving.


PANEL 3. Namor, looking offended, is standing next to Medusa and Charles Xavier.

NAMOR:
What is that supposed to mean?

CHARLES:
I have utmost faith in Stephen's judgement, Namor. You should to.

NAMOR:
But it's just... a book.


PANEL 4. Close up of a large, old, leather-bound book, sitting on a table.

STRANGE:
This is not just a book, I'm afraid.

STRANGE:
It is the legendary Necronomicon.


PANEL 5. From above, we see the group standing around the table. The book is sitting in the middle.

MEDUSA:
So if we possess the book...

MEDUSA:
Why is it a threat?

STRANGE:
Because it's not the only copy.



PAGE ONE

7 comments:

  1. So this is the illuminati as it stands now (Medusa instead of Black Bolt) so Dr.Strange is not sorcerer supreme right? That means he's wearing that stylish black turtleneck he's sporting now righ?

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  2. Yes Danial, yes. I was contemplating something along these lines, and glad I didn't as you would have blown me out of th ewater.

    Well done, man.

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  3. Thanks! I was wanting to include the Illuminati somehow, but I was having trouble thinking of something big enough to warrant them meeting... and so fell back on the ol' Lovecraft, yet again :P

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  4. Not bad, a decent page, but that last line really elevates it all. Well done.

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  5. This really reads like a mid-story page, the sort of well-constructed in-between that's really hard to pull off without the other pages included, or indeed created. But you've done an admirable job, and built a tense and interesting page that would leave me wanting more.

    I applaud you, and wish I had some useful criticism come to mind.

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  6. Great set up, Danial, nice handling of all the individual characters, makes me want to read on.

    You need a second 'o' on the last line of Prof X's dialogue, but other than that I have no niggles.

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  7. I agree with everyone above. This is a really well constructed page. You've made it really easy to "see" the set up without actually writing it, while also creating suspense at the end. Not bad for 5 panels work.

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