Friday, January 14, 2011

Lois Lane - Beyond Metropolis - Matt Duarte

Lois Lane in “Beyond Metropolis” by Matt Duarte

Five panels, all wide and long across the page.

Panel 1

Description: Lois Lane is standing against a wall in an alley, surrounded by three menacing looking men, carrying baseball bats. These thugs are posturing dangerously and approaching her. Despite the fact that she is clear and eminent danger, Lois remains calm, with a smirk on her face.

THUG #1: Boss said you were sniffing around the offices, so we gotta send a message.

THUG #2: Yeah, that being a reporter in this city is bad for your health!

LOIS LANE: Now, gentlemen, that’s no way to talk to a lady, is it? Threats will get you nowhere, besides...

Panel 2

Description: The men are closer to Lois now. Behind them, in the shadows, a man with a wide chest and a flowing cape behind him has appeared. His face is obscured in the dark alley, so we can’t see who it is (but you can probably guess).

LOIS LANE: I already uploaded all the incriminating files to the Gazette’s servers, it will be on the first page tomorrow.

LOIS LANE: And more importantly, my boyfriend is here...

Panel 3

Description: Dark panel with only SFX in it.




Panel 4

Description: The three thugs are laying down on the floor, unconscious. Lois is now approaching her boyfriend, who still covered in the shadows, glad to see him there.

LOIS LANE: What took you so long? I sent the signal ten minutes ago...

BOYFRIEND: Sorry, I was on the other side of the city.

Panel 5

Description: Lois Lane is now embracing Batman (?!). They both have smiles on their faces, as if they were about to kiss.

LOIS LANE: You didn’t give that odious Vale woman any news to cover, did you?

BATMAN: You know I save all my best exclusives for you.

Next: What the heck is going on here?


  1. Alternate reality where Lois decided to become a reporter in Gotham rather than Metropolis, perhaps?

  2. You sneaky man, Matt. I'm referring to the "You can proabably guess who it is" remark. Well done, another solid scrip!

  3. @MK: That does seem the most logical answer... but who said that was Bruce Wayne inside the Batman costume?

    @Ben: Busted! I was playing a bit with the expectations that come with reading the script.

  4. "Alternate reality"... psshhh. I've heard that excuse before Lois. Two-timing --

    haha. Nice job Matt.

  5. Nice Elseworld twist which I didn't see coming. Interesting how many of this week's story have guest starred Batman in one way or another.


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