Thursday, February 10, 2011

Batgirl - Girls Interrupted - Sime McDonald


... continued from last week ...
... sometime later ...

PANEL ONE
Nightfall, in the luscious grounds of Richie Corday's manor. Demolitia is firing her handgun at Batgirl, who is narrowly dodging the speeding projectiles, simultaneously hurling a Batarang in Demolitia's direction.

DEMOLITIA
- - - bitch!

SFX
Blam!
Blam!
Blam!

BATGIRL
Whoooa - - - !

PANEL TWO
Cut to Richie Corday's bedroom. He's sitting up in bed, eyes wide, panicked at the sound of gunfire.

RICHIE CORDAY
 - - - Nyyyarrrrgh!

SFX
(small)
Blam!
Blam!
Blam!

PANEL THREE
Cut back to outside. The Batarang has clattered into Demolitia's gun; she's dropped it and is reeling away from Batgirl, who has landed out of her dive gracefully, with superheroic poise.

BATGIRL (1)
Y'know, I didn't think it was possible,
but in terms of hostility you've surpassed
Robin a thousandfold.

BATGIRL (2)
I'm just here to chat.
And to stop you killing Richie Corday too, sure...
But mostly to chat.

PANEL FOUR
Demolitia's eyes are filled with rage as she prods a finger into her chest, at the Bat-symbol that adorns it.

DEMOLITIA (1)
Just because I work for him doesn't
mean I'm a slave to his symbol.

DEMOLITIA (2)
Corday deserves to - - -

GUARD
(off-panel)
Freeze!

PANEL FIVE
Pull back. A phalanx of bodyguards have their weapons trained on Demolitia and Batgirl.

GUARD
Do not move!

PANEL SIX
Batgirl tilts her head towards Demolitia.

BATGIRL
Team up?


4 comments:

  1. You've brought up a good point here, Sime. How much control will Bruce have over the doings of his recruits? Nice work.

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  2. I like the crisp dialogue here, Sime. Don't really feel I know enough about the characters involved to comment further, but the storytelling gives them clear goals and motivation, so that's the job done. Plus this page works visually, I can see exactly how it would all fit together.

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  3. Pretty great stuff Sime, but saying that is nothing new, considering your tendency to generally be brilliant.

    So instead of praising the living daylights out of you i'll just say that I love this title, if only because it gave me an excuse to put Girl, Interrupted on.

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  4. Love that last line. That and the "Slave to his symbol". Great, great work. One of my favourite scripts of the week.

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