Thursday, February 3, 2011

Batman Inc. - HR Management - Sime McDonald


PANEL ONE
Superman and Batman (Bruce Wayne) are standing on a Metropolis rooftop, their figures illuminated only by moonlight, the sky coated in black paint. Below them, at the forefront of the panel, Demolitia (visual reference) has just delivered a nose-crunching punch to Barrage’s (visual reference) face, smashing him just beneath his visor, blood already gushing from the hit. Demolitia is wearing her traditional costume with a minor alteration; the Bat symbol is prominent on her top.

DEMOLITIA
Hyarrgh!

SFX
CRACK!

SUPERMAN
 I don't like this.
Marita, Bruce?
Really?

PANEL TWO
Batman is smiling, gazing down at his latest recruitment.

BATMAN
Has your walkabout around America eviscerated your noble sensibilities, Clark?
I'm practicing what you used to preach, trying to rehabilitate those who've still got the capacity to do good.

PANEL THREE
Demolitia slams a batarang into the asphalt road beside the unconscious Barrage.

CAPTION
(SUPERMAN)
"Rehabilitate? Or refocus their hate onto your targets?"

PANEL FOUR
Superman hovers above Batman, arms crossed; the Man of Tomorrow trying to intimidate the Dark Knight.

SUPERMAN
Marita needs help, Bruce.
Not this kind of help.
When I last saw her she almost killed Richie Corday.
She's a broken woman who - - -

PANEL FIVE
Cut to Demolitia's apartment. She's tugging off her mask, laying her chunky handgun on a table.

CAPTION
(BATMAN)
"- - - who I'm constantly monitoring, Clark.
Don't worry about Marita."

PANEL SIX
Demolitia has moved out of Panel Five's frame. On the wall she was previously obscuring we see an assortment of newspaper articles and images of Richie Corday, his face circled in several of them. It's clear: she ain't done with him yet.

CAPTION
(BATMAN)
"I've got her under control."

Demolitia and Richie Corday first and last appeared in Action Comics #718 (February 1996).
Barrage first appeared in Superman Annual  Volume 2, #2 (1988) 

 

2 comments:

  1. Sime - the dialogue here is superb. It carries the page and could almost stand alone, the visuals merely allow another layer. I think this is one of your best yet, as it works on more than one front, and I am very jealous.

    Well played, old friend, well played.

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  2. Agree 100% with Ryan. Great work Sime. The dialouge is outstanding, and the story which occompanies it pikes my interest. Well done!

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