Monday, February 14, 2011

Dracula - Not a Team Up - Ben Rosenthal

So I totally continued the script I have had going for the past two weeks - only this isnt it. To see it, head over to Post Humour Comedy and read it there. You're stuck with this one. Will be interesting to see which you prefer. Yes you!



1. Night. We are looking up at Deadpool, who has a gun barrel pointed at the panel. The gun is made of wood. Deadpool looks mighty angry.

DEADPOOL
Normally I would say something witty, like “hang in there” but you’ve just #$@*d me off too much for such niceties.

2. We are now looking down. It is clear that we are on top of a very tall building in Manhattan. Clinging to the side of the building in Dracula, in his classic Christopher Lee-esque costume. He is straining to hold himself up. His chin is resting on the roof, with his body dangling over the side. He will not be able to hold on for much longer.

DRACULA
Please...Wilson...

DRACULA
Remember if I die, so does your father.


3. Same as Panel 1, however Deadpool’s anger has turned to shock and surprise

DEADPOOL
You’re my father?


4. Same as Panel 2, with Dracula looking confused at Wade’s ridiculous assumption.

DRACULA
Uh....yes......


5. Same framing as Panel 3 (looking up at Deadpool from below), however Deadpool has lowered his wooden gun.

DEADPOOL
Then who was my mother?


6. Same as Panel 4, with Dracula sweating (can vampires sweat?) as he frantically tries to save his unlife.

DRACULA
Urm...Estelle Getty?


7. A wide panel showing the entirety of the roof top, New York in the background. Wade is facing us, his wooded gun scratching the side of his head. In the background, Dracula’s word balloon comes from the side of the building as he has finally slipped, and is plunging to his doom.

DEADPOOL
My parents were Estelle Getty and Dracula! Who the hell approved this retcon?

DRACULA (words falling from the side as he falls)
WILSOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON.


7 comments:

  1. I can't really point to anything specifically and say 'this is what I like about it', but I still think it's a fun script that's good for a laugh or two.

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  2. Agreed. It's a silly, off the wall page that's just good fun.

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  3. Always love Deadpool (in small doses), so this made me smile. I'm curious though, why would hanging from a building bother Dracula? Wouldn't he just let go or fly away (depending on the version)?

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  4. Ben, you're an idiot. And I wouldn't have it any other way. There's a goody quality to this that shows you not only love Deadpool but you write him pretty well, too. Sadly, this week was Dracula, and there you fail.

    Go to the back of the class and lose lunchtime ;)

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  5. I am totally busted. At least we now know how little you can use a character for the week before the script isn't based on the character anymore.

    I feel like a cheat, so to make up for it I'm going to post my second Dracula script here. This one follows on from the previous two weeks scripts.

    Dracula – Part 3

    1. A mostly dark panel. We can vaguely see the outline of Dracula.

    DRACULA

    So you have them?

    WORD BALLOON (off panel)

    We do, Master.


    2. Dracula is now more visible as he steps into the (artificial) light of the room.

    DRACULA

    And they are unharmed?

    WORD BALLOON (off panel)

    There was a struggle, so certain…restraints were needed. But they still live, Master.


    3. Dracula looks offended and angry because of it. He cuts and imposing figure.

    DRACULA

    You lie to me. You have fed. I can smell it.


    4. Dick Greyson dressed as Batman stands before Dracula. Vampire teeth are visible from his mouth as he addresses his Master.

    DICK/BATMAN

    On only the girl, to ensure Bruce co-operated. But she still liv….


    5. Batman’s head jerks to the side, and impact of the backhand he has been given by Dracula

    SFX: SMACK!

    DRACULA

    Insolence.


    6. A shot of Dracula. He is holding his hand, looking down at where Batman would be.

    DRACULA

    Nonetheless, you have done well. The House of the Bat is once again mine.

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  6. Oh, and Danial - in an earlier version of the script I had set up that it wasn;t actually Dracula, but that took too much away from the jokes. Plus, it felt like I was apologising for the script. And I don't. At all.

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  7. Ben, I laughed at the official script. It was very visual and I could picture the expression's on Drac's face...

    ...but the Drac you write in the ...Continued script is much more to my liking. He should be the scariest bad ass in the universe, any universe.

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