Sunday, February 13, 2011

Dracula - Safe As Houses - Rol Hirst

Panel One.

A beautiful young woman (Rebecca) in a white nightgown is running through a dark forest in terror, pursued by some unseen horror. It’s night, though bright moonlight flickers through the trees. There’s a low mist on the ground. Her gown has snagged on branches and foliage and is torn and dirtied.

Panel Two.

Breathless, she arrives at a spooky old house, all strange angles and dark windows. Without hesitation she runs up the path towards the front door.

Panel Three.

She bursts through the front door and into the house.

Panel Four.

She slams the door behind her, gasping for air, the relief showing on her face. At last she is safe.

Rebecca: Ha! I… I did it. Escaped. Got… home.

Panel Five.

Rebecca peers out through the peephole in the front door. Behind her, a wisp of red mist curls in the hallway.

Rebecca: I’m safe now. You can’t... can't enter without… I know the rules.

Rebecca: You have to be invited… and I’ll never… I’ll never invite you into my home!

Panel Six.

Rebecca turns in horror as the red mist behind her takes form. It is Dracula. Classic Gene Colan look.

Dracula: Foolish child.

Dracula: Over five hundred years has Dracula walked this earth. Many are the homes which have welcomed him already.

Panel Seven.

Close on Dracula, smiling, baring his teeth. Christopher. Lee.

Dracula: You are not the first to claim ownership over this particular domicile. You will certainly not be the last.


  1. It occurs to me that someone must have written a variation on the sequence above in some vampire fiction or other at some time... it's really quite obvious... but I've never read it, so that's my "I'm not ripping X off" excuse.

  2. Oh, Dracula, you cunning jerk.

    Though for some reason, the emphasis on 'Christopher Lee' made me chuckle.

  3. Awesome! I have never thought of that angle before. Well done man!

    A very clear and detailed script. Great work, as per usual, Mr Rol.

  4. I haven't seen that angle played before. Damn. It's a good angle. YOu pace the page well though the first two panels could have been merged as a quick establishing shot.

    You've kicked off the week well, and chosen a good Dracula.

  5. I've always found the "can't enter a house unless invited" rule to be one of the strangest, but you found a way to make it interesting. Nice work.

  6. Nice page. I can't say that I've seen this twist on the "invitation" rule done before. I feel like the idea only seems obvious in hindsight, so kudos on coming up with thinking it up and executing it so well!


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