Thursday, February 24, 2011

Power Man & Iron Fist - Justice - Sime McDonald

PAGE TWENTY-ONE

PANEL ONE
Wide panel. Samantha Lehane (new character, no reference), a fifty-something, frail, gaunt woman is standing in front of Luke Cage and Iron Fist, the latter of which is clad in his costume, Luke dressed in his standard street attire. She is prodding a finger into Cage’s chest, her stance very much antagonistic. In the background, the Avengers are cleaning up after their battle with Mole Man and his Moloids, their unconscious bodies strewn about the street.

SAMANTHA LEHANE (1)
You owe me, Cage.

SAMANTHA LEHANE (2)
You both do.

PANEL TWO
Cage remains stoic, his emotions masked. Iron Fist isn’t able to match Cage’s blasé expression; he’s remembering.


LUKE CAGE
Lady, we don’t owe you nothing.
Me and him, we did nothing wrong by you.
We did everything by the book.

PANEL THREE
Samantha waves away his words, rage-filled eyes focused on Iron Fist. She knows he’s the weaker link in this pairing.

SAMANTHA LEHANE
Such bullshit.
You did everything wrong.
You know it.
I know it.
Only you won’t say it out loud.
You won’t admit it to my face.

PANEL FOUR
Iron Fist has his hand placed gently on her shoulder; giving it a reassuring squeeze. Cage’s arms are crossed.


IRON FIST (1)
Samantha, you kidnapped your daughter.
You ran away with her. We were hired to find her.
To return her to her legal guardian, her father.

LUKE CAGE
Which we did.

IRON FIST (2)
I’m sorry you’re still bitter after so long, but - - -

PANEL FIVE
Samantha swipes away his arm.


SAMANTHA LEHANE
Bitter?
You think this is about me being fucking bitter?
You think, ten years later, I'm comin' to you 'cause I'm bitter?!
You’ve been playing superheroes with your Avengers for too long, the both of you.
Forgotten what it’s like on the street.
Forgotten what justice is.

PANEL SIX
Now Cage is pissed. He’s had enough of this woman shouting at him. He looms over her. But she’s not frightened. She doesn’t cower. She stands tall, looking up at Cage.


LUKE CAGE
Lady, all we do, every day, is justice.

SAMANTHA LEHANE
Oh yeah?
Do you even remember who my girl’s father is?
Do you know the man you gave a four year old baby too?
Do you know what he's become?

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7 comments:

  1. So it's a MAX title now?

    I like this page, and the back and forth works for me (though I couldn't help but hear Alyssa Jones in Samantha's speech at one stage), and I just have to know....

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  2. ...presumably some kind of Mole Man monster, who's about to attack the boys and grind them into paste. Cool, good handling of the characters, Sime, though as Ryan mentioned, the swears always stand out when they're thrown around in the Marvel Universe.

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  3. Oops, I meant to fuzz out the expletives, I just had 'em written out as I typed the original draft.

    So, to save face... yeah, it's a MAX title now. *Ahem*

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  4. DAMMIT WHAT IS THE FINAL SPLASH PAGE!

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  5. I really love this script. My favorite bit was the way you made the confrontation feel fluid and real, as opposed to just an exchange of line, through the contrast between Luke and Danny's respective demeanors. Having Lehane react to that and adjust her strategy really brought the conversation to life. I actually like the cursing, since Luke seems like the kind of person who'd toss out a mild curse every now and then, despite having to tone it down for Avengers PR purposes. Seeing the superhero mask slip a little makes him feel much more real.

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  6. His father has become who? Who is it?!

    That said, aside from the lone swear word I noticed (and even that seems like a stretch), I'm not getting the whole MAX thing (though maybe it's just because I didn't read this as soon as it was posted).

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  7. Great script, Sime. I agree with everything everyone else has said. My only question is a formatting one: Is Panel 5's dialogue meant to be a single bubble? Because that's one big bubble :)

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