Monday, March 28, 2011

The Artifacts – Hope for the Future - Ben Rosenthal

Setting: A large area, perhaps in the middle of a city or an inner-city park. It is not important. What is important is the fact that whatever it used to be, it is not a mess. A huge force has errupted here, and taken most of the surroundings out. I'm thinking a post-apocolyptic look.

1. Witchblade’s hand lies on the ground. It looks pale, as if it has been drained.

CAPTION (Note: the ‘voice’ that we are reading should look powerful and important.)
I created you. Created everything.

2. The Witchblade and The Darkness lay defeated, next to each other, unconscious. Both are of the same pale colour as Witchblade’s hand in the previous panel.

I was loved and worshipped by all.

But I was forsaken. Shattered, then imprisoned by those who once did my bidding.

3. A wider shot, with the wielders of the 13 Artifacts are scattered on the ground. Witchblade and The Darkness are in the centre. All have the pale drained complexion.

However, my return was preordained.

Amusing. You thought she was the hope for my universe.

4. Hope Pezzini floats above the fallen thirteen. She is possessed with power – eye’s cracking with raw energy, covered in a weird amalgamation of The Darkness and The Witchblade’s armour, with wings of The Angelus behind her. Hope is only 1-2 years old, so this scene should look horrifying and creepy.

She’s not Hope at all. She is but a Vessel.


  1. Nice one, Ben. I really liked this. The only thing that threw me was the first panel. I didn't know if the hand had been severed, or was just a close-up. That is all.

  2. Oh damn. I had some expectations for what people would manage to do with my insanely ridiculous character choice and you... you exceeded them and then some. Well done, I salute you.

  3. I like the idea of an all-powerful toddler. Now that's TRUE evil!


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