Wednesday, March 23, 2011

Blue Beetle - Come Together - Rol Hirst

Panel One.

Dan Garret, in old-style police uniform, wakes. He is lying on the floor, face down in the dirt, in a darkened room. He lifts his head and looks around.

CAP: Dan Garret…

DAN: Woah… head feels like a Pamplona bull run. Someone must’ve slipped me a mickey…

Panel Two.

As Dan picks himself up, he realises he’s not alone. Across from him lies industrialist Ted Kord, in an ill-fitting business suit. Kord has been piling on the pounds again.

DAN: And it looks like I’m not the only one—

Panel Three.

Suddenly Kord sits bolt upright and starts laughing.

TED: Bwahahahahahaha--!

CAP: Ted Kord…

Panel Four.

Bewildered and embarrassed, Kord stops laughing and stares at Garret. We’re watching their exchange over the shoulder of a third man, Jaime Reyes…

TED: Heh. Ahem… sorry. Why am I sitting on my ass in the dirt? Why am I fat again? Why am I laughing?

JAIME: I dunno, dude, but I reckon I can put an end to that...

Panel Five.

Garret and Kord both turn to face a revealed Jaime Reyes. He’s holding a portable computer – alien tech, similar to that which created the Blue Beetle scarab. But like his predecessors, he’s in his everyday clothing too. The screen of the computer is covered in alien symbols. Jaime looks worried.

CAP: Jaime Reyes…

JAIME: In case you're not fluent in alien-scarab-esperanto, this here says only one of us gets out of this room alive…

JAIME: And I’m sorry, I hate to pull rank on you guys, but… the truth of the matter is…

Panel Six.

Shot from behind Jaime, looking over both his shoulders this time, catching the confused, troubled reactions of both Ted and Dan as Jaime says…

JAIME: Only one of us actually came into this room alive to begin with.


  1. It's like Saw but, y'know, for kids.

    I like it.

  2. I'm really intrigued by this piece. It makes me want to turn the page and find out what's going on, which is the most you can ask for, as far as I'm concerned. Well done!

  3. I have no idea who Dan Garret or Ted Kord are, but I really liked this page. It was fun :)

  4. @Danial: Dan and Ted were the former Blue Beetles.

    Rol, this is great. You set up quite a big mystery, and as Grant said, it just makes you want to turn the page and continue reading.

    Also, "alien-scarab-esperanto" is a great phrase.


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