Saturday, March 26, 2011

Blue Beetle - The Man of T.O. Morrow, Part 2 - Danial Carroll


[I don't know if this has been done before, or is even allowed, but I'm going to run with it anyway, and deal with the beratement later :P]


PANEL ONE
Professor Morrow is leaning over a still unconscious Jaime. His back is to us so we can't see exactly what he is doing.


PANEL TWO
Same view as the previous, except now Morrow is holding the Scarab is the air like a sporting trophy.

CAPTION: An hour later...

MORROW: It is mine!


PANEL THREE
From the front, we see Morrow reaching over his head to put the Scarab in place on his back. It's legs have already wrapped around him. He is smiling triumphantly.


PANEL FOUR
Close on Morrow's face, now looking confused.


PANEL FIVE
Identical view as the last, only now he is wincing in pain. There is a dribble of blood trickling from his nose.

MORROW: ->Gkk<-


PANEL SIX
Close on Jaime, waking groggily and rubbing his head.

JAIME: What... Where am--


PANEL SEVEN, WIDE
Jaime, with the Scarab on his back, is now sitting up on the operating table, looking horrified. Before him, on the floor, lays Professor Morrow. His torso has been ripped wide open like an autopsy subject. Blood is sprayed all around.

JAIME: Oh my god...

JAIME: What have I done?


Layout

2 comments:

  1. I wondered how long it would be befosmeone chose to write a sequel to one of the other TBers scripts. No rule against it Danial, if I were Simon I'd be flattered. I like what you've done here - particularly Jaime's reaction with lifts it beyond the obvious twist.

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  2. Continuing someone else's script is completely legal. But it doesn't make it canon - Sime may not agree with what you've done. Ha.

    I really like the page layout at the bottom, that sort of thing is always cool.

    This page made me think of Carpenter's The Thing. Make of that what you will.

    This page isn't bad, Danial. It works with flow and the lack of words make it feel like a spartan horror. I'm interested to see Reyes' action be that way.

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