Saturday, March 5, 2011

Venom - Savior? - Danial Carroll


PAGE ONE (seven panels)


PANEL 1. An extreme close up of Deadpool, heavily blurred.

DEADPOOL:
Wakey wakey.


PANEL 2. Close on Deadpool and Venom's (Flash) heads. Deadpool has slapped Venom across the face.

VENOM:
Hey! We're awake already!

DEADPOOL:
I know. I just like slapping people.


PANEL 3. Wider view, revealing that Venom is bound with very thick chains to a furnace. Deadpool is standing before him. Both are in a non-descript maintenance cellar.

VENOM:
What are you--? How--

DEADPOOL:
Sorry, this page is far too small for a flashback. You'll just have to roll with it.

DEADPOOL:
All you need to know...


PANEL 4. Close on Deadpool, pointing. Despite the mask, you can tell he's smiling proudly.

DEADPOOL:
Is that I'm here to save you.

DEADPOOL:
From the suit.


PANEL 5. Wide view again, with Deadpool pointing up at Panel 2. Venom looks to be struggling against the chains.

VENOM:
I don't need saving. I'm fully in control of the suit.

DEADPOOL:
Are you? Really? I can see a wordballoon that says otherwise.

VENOM:
Wordballoon?

DEADPOOL:
Bah, amateurs.

DEADPOOL:
You said, we're awake, meaning the suit is bonding with you.


PANEL 6. Close on Venom, with one eyebrow raised.

VENOM:
Hmmm...

VENOM:
And how exactly do you plan to save me?

DEADPOOL (OP):
Like this--


PANEL 7. From Venom's POV, we see Deadpool pointing two pistols at us.

DEADPOOL:
Gimme gimme gimme!

3 comments:

  1. This feels far more like a Deadpool script than it is a Venom, but I'm not complaining, Danial because I LOVED it. It actually made me laugh out loud and I NEVER laugh out loud.

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  2. Glad you enjoyed it :) I knew as I was writing it that it had become more a Deadpool script. I was suffering some serious writer's block writing Venom for some reason, so when this came to me, I just went with it.

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  3. You know, the one thing I do not like about Deadpool is when he references that he is in a comic. However, the way you have handled it here, as a part of the plot but asl oas a joke...man, awesome. Love the script Danial.

    Sure, it's not reall a Venom script, but who am I to criticise anyone for doing that?

    So is Deadpool officially the most used character without being chosen yet?

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