Thursday, April 14, 2011

Green Wake - Summer Dreaming - Sime McDonald

PANEL ONE

Tobias (new character, no reference) is gazing upwards, at the sky, though the shot is angled so we can’t see it. He’s clad in tattered clothes, maybe, once, ages ago, fashionable garb, now reduced to rags.

CAPTION (1)
Once, when the clouds dissipated,
I would look to the sky in search of the first hint of sunshine.

CAPTION (2)
I would just stare.
Just watch as the sunlight pierced through its cocoon.

PANEL TWO
A slight smile curves Tobias’ lips.


CAPTION
My mother called it Summer Dreaming.

PANEL THREE
At another time, in another place, this might be a snapshot of tranquillity, of a man at peace with himself and the world, looking up to the sky, to the heavens. But not here. This is Green Wake. We’ve pulled back from the first panel. Now, we can see the sky. It’s coated in black paint, not even the faintest hint of a glimmer of light. It’s unnatural. Unnerving.


CAPTION (1)
Now, even when the sky clears,
the outlook is no less obscure.

CAPTION (2)
There is just darkness. Blackness.
Stretching on for eternity.

PANEL FOUR
Pull back farther. Tobias is standing on the edge of a cliff. The world stretches out before him, never-ending in its blackness.


CAPTION
In Green Wake, there are no dreams.

PANEL FIVE
Tobias has one foot dangling off the edge.


CAPTION
Just one, everlasting nightmare.

PANEL SIX
Tobias, falling, in darkness, into blackness.

CAPTION (1)
God.

CAPTION (2)
I miss my mother.

PANEL SEVEN
Black.



8 comments:

  1. Is it just me, or is Green Wake a really depressing place?

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  2. I love bleak, and man, Sime, that was bleak.

    Great stuff!

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  3. Man, Green Wake is seriously depressing place. Perhaps someone should write a script where some guy just loves it there. That would be cool, right...?

    Sime, I like this script. It's got the tone of GW down pat, but it's not just about depression, it's about foregoing all the dreams you once had, it's about giving up. And I think you convey that nicely. I like the tie to the mother memory. This works for me completely.

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  4. Sime, this is great. If this is "out of your wheelhouse", then perhaps you've been in the wrong wheelhouse all along. It reminded me again of Dark City, where one character realizes that there's no way out and so jumps in front of a train. Loved it!

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  5. Fuck.

    Yes.

    This was great, the loss of hope, the realization of permanence.

    Thanks for sharing!

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  6. So this is you struggling? Bloody. Hell.

    I think Sime should have to retire from Thought Balloons here and now. If this is him struggling, we are all screwed when he hits his stride.

    Sime, this page is beautiful. The visuals are described vividly, as for the narrative...wow.

    A very well done, indeed!

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  7. Wow, thanks Kurtis. I'll be living off your plaudit for a long, long time, ha!

    Thanks for the kind words everyone. Really wasn't sure about this script. Thrilled it's got a positive reception!

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