Sunday, May 22, 2011

Irish - Heist - Ryan K Lindsay

1. Splash page of Irish’s car sliding sideways on the rain soaked road and slamming into the one cop at the blockade not quick enough to get out of the way. This is a gory splash, the cop is getting annihilated by the back right side of the car. His head is snapping back, his arm and legs are breaking. He’s dead.
Irish: Eat shit, you cocksucking fascist goons!
Cop: Gak!
Caption: I’m usually so much nicer. I swear.
Caption: My blood gets a little more Irish when I work a heist that falls apart like a high school fuck buddy relationship.
Caption: Usually, I’m the cool head in the group. I’m the one who doesn’t get emotional.
Caption: I’m beyond emotion by this stage. Here, I’m just surviving.
Caption: Or trying to.
Caption: This is what happens when a heist goes wrong.

This book is about our getaway driver, Irish, before and after a heist on a cryptozoological zoo goes pear shaped. He's a slightly different character from the ones I usually write, and I chose this splash page because I feel it represents his nature well. It's also one hell of a moment to open onto Page 2 with, and maybe even make it a double splash with Page 3. I don't write splashes often but this one felt so right for the book, the character, the scene. It works here as an introduction to the charcater as well as a statement of intent for the series. Irish is prepared to do anything, always, and this time his sister got left behind on the job so he's super pissed. But inside, he's not a bad guy. Emotional? Sure. Temperamental? Definitely. But he's a survivor.

If I had my druthers, Kurt Russell would be playing the role with John Carpenter behind the lens. That should tell you about all else you need to know.


  1. I'd like to see Kurt Russell staring in a comic, especially if John Carpenter was in charge of the art direction. Make it happen! :)

  2. Pretty interesting page/splash, and totally one that'd make me want to see more of the story.

    There's usually a feeling of there not being much substance whenever one of us does a low panel count page, but the narration totally carries it past that problem and such. nice work

  3. Page is great. My only niggle is the "high school fuck buddy relationship" line. It seems too explainitory, making it seem unnatural.

    Having said that, I have no idea what I would put in its place.

  4. Cool splash, Ryan. Left wanting to turn the page and carry on. I assume I won't have to wait until Thought-Balloons second anniversary! :)

  5. This does seem a rather different page for you, Ryan. That said, I really like it. It comes across as really intense, kind of a combination of Sin City and the Marvel's MAX line, in my mind.

    The splash is certainly striking, and I think the caption boxes do a good job of providing some meaning to the gruesome image. Makes me want to know more, which is always a good thing.

  6. Somehow, this was exactly what I expected from you, Ryan - hard-boiled action... would fit in well with Brubaker / Phillips Criminal.


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