Saturday, May 7, 2011

Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles - TMNT MAX - Danial Carroll

PANEL ONE, WIDE
Establishing shot of an expensive mansion. Armed guards, some with dogs, patrol the grounds. Think True Lies.


PANEL TWO
Two guards are patrolling together, passing under a tree. They have a dog with them.


PANEL THREE
The dog is being pulled into the air via a long garrote wire around its neck. The guards are staring in shock.

GUARD: Wha--


PANEL FOUR
Close up on one guard, holding his neck. We can see a ninja star protruding from between his fingers. Blood is spraying from the severed carotid artery.

GUARD: ->GLKK<-


PANEL FIVE
Close up on the other guard. He has his radio to his mouth, about to speak. He looks terrified. Behind him, in the darkness, we see two black glistening eyes and the shine of a blade approaching the man's neck.


PANEL SIX
Wide shot, showing the dog hanging dead from the tree, the first guard dead on the ground, and the second guard on his knees, clutching at his slashed neck, his hands and clothes already soaked in blood. There is no sign of their assailants.

1 comment:

  1. JESUS CHRIST!!

    Sure, we don't see the turtles in the panel , but that what good Ninja's should be like. Thay shouldn;t be walking down the satreet waving to people after they have vanquiched a giagantic round robot with a huge eyeball to Dimension X.

    Have I mentioned how stupid the Ninja Turtle cartoon is?

    I would really like to see a comic where the turtles are ruthless ninja's. Well done.

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