Saturday, June 18, 2011

Dashiell Bad Horse – Off the Reservation - MK Stangeland Jr.

(5 Panels)

Panel 1: Dark Panel, from the inside of the trunk of a car. Little, if anything, can be seen.

SFX: bang bang bang


Panel 2: A blinding light as the trunk is open, though the outline of BAD HORSE blocks out a section of the light.


Panel 3: Exterior shot as BAD HORSE pulls RED CROW out of the trunk of the car. For the most part, RED CROW looks physically fine outside of what might be expected for having been stuck in a car trunk for several hours, and he’s understandably ticked off.


RED CROW: Do you have any idea what you’ve done?!

BAD HORSE: Yeah. I’ve brought you along for a little road trip far outside the safety of your normal jurisdiction.

Panel 4: RED CROW kneels on the ground as he tries to recover. He’s not doing such a good job of it at the moment, which is to be expected. BAD HORSE stands tall, allowing him to tower over RED CROW.

RED HORSE: Where…where are we?

Panel 5: Wide panel. A “Welcome to Kansas” greeting sign is in the foreground and off to the side of the panel, showing that BAD HORSE and RED CROW are just on the other side of the state boarder. The two of them can be seen in the background on the other side of the panel.

BAD HORSE: I’m sure you’ll figure it out soon enough on your own.



  1. That's an intriguing opening page, MK, makes me want to know what Dash has in store for Red Crow. You mixed up your Horses and Crows in panel 4... but that just got me thinking of new story / character possibilities.

  2. A really intriguing page, MK. Raises a lot of questions in a way that grabs the reader, making them want to know more. Good stuff.

  3. I have a feeling that Red Crow would be pretty pissed about this. Punch first, ask questions later level of pissed.

  4. I like this, intrigue, betrayal, redemption (?), Kansas. It's got it all :)

    Rol pointed out the typo - good ol' Rol!

    Also, you posted at midnight and it should have been midday. Give Grant's script 18 hours to breathe, not 6.

  5. @ Ryan: Oops, sorry. Guess I haven't figured out the post time system as well as I thought.


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