Tuesday, June 21, 2011

Green Lantern – The Finger – Rol Hirst

Panel One.

Close on the severed middle finger of Hal Jordan, laid out on a white table. The finger is still clad in the white Green Lantern glove – tattered and bloodied at the severed end – and the ring is still attached.

VO1 (off-panel): How on earth did you get it?

VO2 (off-panel): Yellow Stihl saw.

Panel Two.

A red hand reaches down and pulls the ring from Jordan’s finger.

VO1 (O/P): I thought the rings were free of the yellow impurity nowadays?

VO2 (O/P): So did Jordan. But Parallax is never completely defeated. It only took one moment’s hesitation…

Panel Three.

Sinestro stands holding the ring. The severed finger is still on the table in front of him. He is in a white room, very sci fi, some kind of space station. We can’t see who he’s talking to.

VO1 (O/P): What did you do with the body?

Sinestro: Fed it to the Calvarian Cuttlefish.

VO1 (O/P): They’ll eat Green Lantern?

Sinestro: If you chop it up finely.

Panel Four.

Sinestro gets down on one knee. He’s looking up at us / at the person he’s talking to.

VO1 (O/P): So what are you planning on doing with it now?

Sinestro: I thought I might give it to you… if you’d be so kind…

Panel Five.

Finally we see who Sinestro is talking / proposing to. It’s Carol Ferris, dressed as Star Sapphire. She seems surprised… but there’s a wicked smile on her face too as Sinestro slips the ring onto her finger.

Sinestro: Carol Ferris… will you marry me?

Carol: Oh, Thaal… I thought you’d never ask.


  1. What's the Thaal mean?

    Otherwise, an interesting premise. I'm sure Johns will get around to it, it's a bloody concept.

  2. Haha, I can already tell Hal's gonna get little love here. Are we looking at a week full of Kenny-esque deaths? :)

    But the premise is interesting, I definitely want to know more about what the hell is going on.

    Ryan - Thall is his first name. Thall Sinestro. Only very recently established, AFAIK.

  3. Yeah, Thaal. Double A, double L, whatever. :P

  4. Dunno how I feel about the page conceptually--I need more context to tell whether I'd want to read more of this story. That said,the exchange in Panel 3 is absolutely pitch-perfect dark humor, and I love this page for it.

  5. I really like the page. The dialogue comes off really well and it has some good flow.

    I especially enjoy your naming here. "Calvarian Cuttlefish" is so incredibly evocative and fits right in. I've always found that part of cosmic stories to be one of the hardest - to think of words that sound real and otherworldly at the same time. You nail that here.

    Well done.

  6. So have we officially fond the least amount of page time a week's character can have? A finger...that's gotta be a record, right? :P


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