Friday, June 24, 2011

Green Lantern - Unimaginative - Danial Carroll


[WARNING: The following script may contain sexual references and is recommended for mature audiences :P]


PANEL ONE
This panel is simply a closed bedroom door. The balloons are coming from within.

WOMAN: Oh...
WOMAN: Yeah...
WOMAN: ->NNNPH!!<-
WOMAN: ->SIGH<-


PANEL TWO
Same shot of the door. Again, the balloon is coming from within.

WOMAN: My God, Hal, you're AMAZING!


PANEL THREE, HALF-PAGE SPLASH
From a low angle, we see Hal from the waist up. He has no clothes on, save for his ring, which he is holding up in a fist. It is glowing.

HAL: Nah, Baby, I just have a good imagination.

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8 comments:

  1. AryehJune 24, 2011 at 1:57 PM

    Unclear on what's going on here. Is the girl a ring construct? Is he augmenting his junk? Maybe I'm not seeing the forest for the trees, but I left this confused, rather than laughing.

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  2. Grant McLaughlinJune 24, 2011 at 2:13 PM

    I think it works pretty well left to the reader's imagination. There doesn't necessarily have to be a right or wrong answer, I suppose. I think it's a pretty solid take on some of the ring's more "intimate" uses, if you will. ;)

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  3. Ryan K LindsayJune 24, 2011 at 3:31 PM

    Ladies and gentleman, James Robinson just wrote this guest strip.

    Right..?

    I just thought it was a silly use of Hal and his ring but I like Aryeh's idea of him constructing his own woman with the ring. Every GL is never lonely, how funny. That has to be done at some stage. Perhaps it'll occur following the set up in my script!

    My major edit would be - we should come through the door and see the sounds have actually been emanating from Guy Gardner in there with him.

    And with that, I bid you all a great weekend!

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  4. RolJune 24, 2011 at 4:10 PM

    I like the way your mind works, Danial. (And that you leave it to our imagination.)

    (I posted this comment yesterday but blogger ate it.)

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  5. DanialJune 24, 2011 at 6:45 PM

    It's good to be cryptic and ambiguous sometimes ;)

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  6. DanialJune 24, 2011 at 6:47 PM

    For the record though, Ryan was right. I was merely being flippant :)

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  7. IvanJune 26, 2011 at 2:41 AM

    Wouldn't it be funny if Hal was getting kinky with his ring and all of a sudden a Guardian bursts into the room saying he shouldn't use the ring for self-satisfaction? :P

    Fun script.

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  8. Ben RosenthalJune 26, 2011 at 11:16 AM

    AHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHHA!


    HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAH!


    BWAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

    Brilliant Danial.

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