Monday, June 27, 2011

J. Jonah Jameson - Eulogy - Ben Rosenthal

1. A podium sits on a small intimate stage. Flowers line the walls, and cover the coffin in the back ground. Behind the podium is J. Jonah Jameson. His head is down, hand to his mouth as he clears his throat. His shoulders are slumped, as if he is a defeated man.


2. Jameson has the same posture, but now grips a sheet of paper with two hands, which we can see just poking out from the top of the podium. His head still bowed as he reads.

JAMESON

Marla was a good person.


3. Same as Panel 2, with Jameson once again clearing his throat.


4. Same as Panel 2, with Jameson looking longingly at the coffin to his left.


5. Same as Panel 2.

JAMESON

Marla was a good person. She gave her kindness and love freely. Her affection and caring for her friends and family was beyond reproach, and we will never see another like her.


6. This panel is framed in the same way as all previous panels. Jameson is standing away from the podium, side on with the coffin. His hand placed on it.

JAMESON

I won’t.


7. The same framing as all previous panels, however the stage is empty.



For those of you wondering, Marla’s last words to Jonah were "Don’t waste any more of your life on hate… I love…” She died in his arms.

5 comments:

  1. Very good, really heartfelt.

    If you don't mind me saying, I think it would maybe work better if panel 6 was a flashback of the moment when Marla dies and says that, and panel 7 is "I won't". But I get that "I won't" fits well both with what Jonah just said in panel 5 and with Marla's dying moment. It works great as it is.

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  2. I like the static camera work. This is an emotional piece.

    Though, I keep reading Jonah's line as being a response to his second last sentence. Makes this suddenly seem very dark. But maybe that's just me.

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  3. That's a powerful page, Ben, and a surprising choice for this character. It's my own fault that whenever I hear a eulogy that begins "X was a good person" I can only hear "Donny was a good bowler and a good man."

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  4. Totally unexpected and very different aspect that none of us seemed to zero in on.

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  5. A moving piece. A great look at what could have happened at her funeral. Rings very true for the character and the situation.

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