Saturday, June 4, 2011

Zatanna - A Hctam Edam Ni Nevaeh, II .tP – MK Stangeland Jr.

(6 Panels)

Panel 1: ZATANNA sits in a chair in her apartment, looking at a pocket watch.

ZATANNA (1): (Text box carrying over from the previous page.) Don’t worry. I think I know someone who can help.

ZATANNA (2): Hmmm…he’s late.

Panel 2: Similar to Panel 1. A burst of smoke has erupted from near where ZATANNA is sitting. MR. MXYZPTLK’s silhouette can be seen in the middle of the smoke. ZATANNA looks towards the smoke and smiles, as she knows who’s just appeared and has been expecting them.


MR. MXYZPTLK: Muah-ha! I have returned!

ZATANNA: If fashionably so.

Panel 3: MR. MXYZPTLK stays in place in the air, but looks towards ZATANNA, and has a disappointed look on his face.

MR. MXYZPTLK: Oh. It’s you again.

ZATANNA (1): That it is.

ZATANNA (2): I happen to have a job for you, if you’d prefer not to leave right away this time.

Panel 4: MR. MXYZPTLK looks astonished and outraged. ZATANNA looks like she may be enjoying the situation just a wee tad bit much.

MR. MXYZPTLK: What?! You would dare to blackmail a denizen of the fifth dimension!

ZATANNA (1): I’m not sure I’d call it ‘blackmail’.

ZATANNA (2): But yes, I would. Do a little favor for me, and I’ll let you stay around Earth until you decide to get into trouble again. Otherwise, I’ll send you right back where you came from.

MR. MXYZPTLK: Well, I’ll be having none of it!

Panel 5: ZATANNA opens her mouth as she prepares to make MR. MXYZPTLK send himself back home. MR. MXYZPTLK holds out his hands in front of him in protest as he changes his mind.

ZATANNA (1): If you insist.


MR. MXYZPTLK: No, wait!

Panel 6: Smaller panel focusing on MR. MXYZPTLK. He sits in the air with his arms and legs crossed in front of him and somewhat hunched over. He looks particularly grumpy about allowing himself to be pulled into agreeing with ZATANNA’s terms.

MR. MXYZPTLK: Alright, you stupid witch. What do you need me to do?


(As you might imagine, this is a sequel to the Mr. Mxyzptlk script that Rol wrote last September, "A Hctam Edam Ni Nevaeh", and follows the further adventures of Zatanna and Mr. Mxyzptlk.)


  1. Wow - thanks, MK, I'm honoured! I actually considered writing a sequel to that story myself as it's one of my favourite tb pieces but I couldn't come up with an angle. Glad that someone proved smarter than me!

  2. Tight script MK. Flows very nicely indeed, as well as capturing the voices of the characters. You have done Rol proud.

  3. I like it, MK. It's good and punchy. Grabs the reader's curiosity - why would Zatanna need Mxyzptlk's help?


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