Friday, July 1, 2011

J. Jonah Jameson - Piece of Cake? - Grant McLaughlin

(I'd just like to take a moment to wish everyone a Happy Canada Day.  I know I'm the only Canadian on the team, but the happenstance of my script going live on July 1 was too good to pass up.  I hope you have a great day - I know that's what I'll be doing!)

There are four rows of panels. The first row is one long and thin panel, taking up one sixth of the page. The second and third rows are both comprised of three panels of equal size, taking up a third of the page each. The fourth row, like the first, is a single long and thin panel, taking up the remaining sixth of the page.

1 – Jonah stands in a meeting room at City Hall. Before him is a table covered with “healthy” snacks. Think salads, granola, sushi, and all types of clichéd food of that sort. Jonah does not look impressed. Glory stands to the side, looking on.

JONAH (1): What the hell are all these leaves and pieces of granola doing here, Ms. Grant?

JONAH (2): What happened to the sandwiches? The cookies? The cake?

GLORY: We discussed this, Jonah. After your recent doctor's appointment, it was strongly suggested that you cut down on the sweets and have more, shall we say, nutritious foods available at City Hall.

2 – Jonah looks towards Glory, agitated that his regular treats are absent.

JONAH: Do I pay you to feed me, Ms. Grant?

GLORY: No, sir. You pay me to do what's in the best interest of the Mayor's Office.

3 – Jonah, frustration rising, raises his hands in exasperation, motioning towards the table of food. Glory, keeping her cool, tries to assuage his displeasure.

JONAH: And this--

GLORY (interrupting): Is in the best interest of the Mayor's Office? Most assuredly.

4 – Jonah has picked up a piece of sushi and is examining it suspiciously. Glory shrugs her shoulders.

JONAH: Well, it looks awful.

5 – Close up on Jonah. He has popped the sushi in his move and is making a face of revulsion. The food he's eating is clearly not to his liking – to put it mildly.

JONAH: And it tastes worse.

GLORY (off-panel): I understand that, sir, but you're not as young as you used to be...

6 – Same angle. For a moment, Jonah is incensed at Glory's comment. He looks furious, as if he's about to unleash on her. No dialogue.

7 – Same angle. The rage is gone. In its place, Jonah wears an expression of intense sadness. Glory has moved closer and has a hand on Jonah's shoulder, comforting him.

JONAH: Never get old, Glory.

GLORY: I'll see what I can do, Jonah.

8 – Return to the angle from the first panel. The image is in silhouette. Jonah has both his hands on the table, leaning down towards the plates of food. Glory remains at his side, supportive and comforting.

GLORY: Should I send in your one o'clock, sir?

JONAH (1): ...

JONAH (2): Yes.


  1. I can't imagine he was too thrilled about loosing access to his cigars, either.

  2. I like how you turn this around, Grant, from just another Jonah rant... to a touching moment where the great man faces his own mortality. Given another page, I'd fully expect you to turn it back the other way.

    Happy Canada Day.

  3. Great banter between that two, Grant. You got the relationship between Glory and Jonah down to a tee.


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