Monday, August 29, 2011

Batwoman - My Heart Is The Worst Kind Of Weapon - Maxy Barnard

After smashing my head into a wall for weeks on end, I return. And with a very particular idea for a script about our delightful Kate Kane. You may recall, if you put your mind back to the mega event 52 (how appropriate considering the 'new 52' Batwoman is finding herself in now), she survived a pretty damaging knife wound to the chest.

And so a very comic-booky plot comes to mind. Because isn't it strange how she survived such a fatal wound, even considering it's a comic book or whatever? Well, RETCON! Nanites on the blade assisted in her healing, items placed into her system by a mysterious background figure, intent on delaying her sacrifice to turn her into deadly weapon!

We join the story as her implanted heart-weapon has kicked in, sucking a stream of blood from the chest of the planned target (a gang boss she was monitoring) and into her own.


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#.1
Sitting on the roof now, Batwoman is patting her steaming chest, where the remnant of the blood that entered her chest has left a typical cartoon-style heart pattern dyed into her skin.

CAPTION: What in the world--?


#.2
Street level view now angled up towards the rooftop, as various gangsters both go to check on their fallen boss and look and point up to where they saw the mysterious eruption of blood go.

GANGSTER: IT CAME FROM UP THERE!

ALSO A GANGSTER: THEN GET UP THERE AND GET WHOEVER DID THIS ALREADY!


#.3
Batwoman is steadying herself and clutching her side, wincing in pain.

BATWOMAN: Damn. Have to get ahold of Dad, mission's compromised... And then some.


#.4
Batwoman with two fingers to the ear of her mask, activating her communications device.

BATWOMAN: Come i-


#.5
Overlapping panel of Batwoman, mouth wide open in pain as a loud shrieking sound comes over her comms.

SFX (comms): SKREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE--

BATWOMAN: AARGH!


#.6
The sound peters out, as Batwoman covers her ears in pain, teeth gritted.

VOICE (comms): EEEEE--skrsh--atwoman?--eee-- I--his-you?

BATWOMAN: Who is this?


#.7
Panel coming out of the Batwoman's ear-piece from the previous panel, of a silhouetted face leaning into a microphone.

VOICE: Doesn't matter. Just know that you have to do what I tell you...


#.8
Close-up on Batwoman grimacing.

VOICE (comms): Or you'll die quite horribly.

4 comments:

  1. So great to see a page that is big,cool and crazy the way some comics just need to be. Cool concept with a lot going on in the single page. You hooked me in man, would definitely love to see where this would go.

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  2. Nice set up, Max, and a suitably Morrison-esque premise. A lot of panels, but they're small, tight images so I reckon JHW could cope.

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  3. Cool concept, and it'd be interesting to see how this would be laid out on the page panel wise.

    Panels 4 and 5 could have perhaps been combined to give the captions/dialogue a bit more room, but other than that this was a solid page.

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  4. A big, exciting concept, Max, and you introduce it quite efficiently here. I'd really like to see where this goes / who is responsible.

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