Sunday, August 7, 2011

Captain Marvel - Put Away The Childish Things - Maxy Barnard

Just a basic transformation script, framed against Corinthians 13:11. Enjoy.


Young Billy Batson is sitting at a train station, playing cards with Talky Tawny (in his 'hobo' form) and laughing, red-faced and wide mouthed, clutching his sides.

Caption: When I was a child, I spake as a child.

A low shot, so we can see Billy and Tawny turning their heads sharply to look up at the sky, where Alligators with jetpacks are flying towards an aeroplane. Whilst Tawny looks suitably shocked by this, Billy is grinning.

Caption: I understood as a child, I thought as a child.

A lightning-bolt shaped panel wherein Billy transforms into Captain Marvel. At the forefront we have Billy shouting, and behind him we have Captain Marvel himself, looking stern and ready to fight. Behind HIM is the word SHAZAM!, to signify the transformation.

Caption: But when I became a man,

Captain Marvel rocketing upwards through the sky, teeth gritted, as the jetpacking alligators look back at him in surprise.

Caption: I put the childish things away.


  1. @Max Wow. I hugely enjoyed this page. I am pretty sure I loved everything about it. You had a strong mix of the lighthearted big adventure type elements like the jetpacking alligators but mixed it with the simply wonderful frame work of Corinthians 13:11 that fitted in with perfectly with exactly what Captain Marvel is all about, a young man who is thrust in to adulthood by the responsibilities that have been rest on his shoulders.

    Your opening page is making me work even harder on my piece for this entry as you have set the bar so very high. I tip my hat to you sir.

  2. I want to like it, but I'm getting a sense of disconnect between the words and the visuals. From what Shaun said, however, it could just be me.

  3. @Mk Perhaps with a different character the juxtaposition would feel maybe forced or wrong even but with Captain Marvel you already have this juxtaposition of young man and all powerful superhero at the core of the book so for me anyway the captions and visuals just go hand in hand to highlight this fact.

  4. I think this was perhaps my favourite page.

    I just really liked the verse as a frame to lay the visuals out on. It works well with the character too, with the biblical connotations gelling slightly with his mythological roots.

  5. That's some quality work there, Max. The imagery is top notch (kudos on the alligatormen) and it reads perfectly with the Corinthians verse. Well done!

  6. A strong page, Max... I guess I was just surprised that, as he was your choice, you didn't want to do a little more with the character.


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