Friday, September 2, 2011

Batwoman - Consequences - Grant McLaughlin

1 – Colonel Kane is sitting at his computer, tracking mission data or whatever. He wears a neutral expression.

KATE (off-panel): Ugh. These daytime missions are killer.


2 – Kate is now standing behind him, wearing her Batwoman costume. The shot is angled in a way that everything above Batwoman's neck is off-panel. She is in the midst of taking off her gloves.

KATE: I spent the better part of the day on a hot tin roof staking out that warehouse.

3 – Jake looks behind him to talk with Kate. Kate has taken off her mask and wig, holding them in front of her. Jake is surprised by what he sees, stopping his speech in mid-sentence.

KATE: And let me tell you, this suit does not breathe.

JAKE: But did you manag--

4 – Shot from over Kate's shoulder. The reader still cannot see her face. Beyond the back of her head, Colonel Kane is now standing, trying to contain a grin – and failing.

JAKE: Kate, how long were you outside for?

5 – Switch angles. We now see Kate's face for the first time. She has a wicked mask burn. Everything that would be exposed (her face below the nose, that small space on her forehead) is badly sunburned and is a bright shade of red. The rest of her face is its normal ghostly white hue, giving the impression that she is still wearing a mask. She has absolutely no idea that this is the case and looks rather perplexed at Colonel Kane's words and smile.

KATE: Why do you ask?

1 comment:

  1. This was a fun read and a bit lighter in tone than most of the other entries this week.

    There's also some potential connotations going on there visually as well. She removes the mask but there's an imprint that suggests she's still wearing it. I have no idea if that was intentional or not. Heh.


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