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1. Eric O’Grady hides in red hair. He is in some sort of cold weather Ant-Man suit.
Caption-O’Grady: I’ve done some pretty shitty things in my time.
Caption-O’Grady: The girl at the grave – what was her name?
Caption-O’Grady: Those three girls at the casino. Full moon, yeesh.
Caption-O’Grady: I even committed mopery. Once.
2. We pan back to see Eric on the head of a lovely looking woman. She’s got gorgeous red hair and a fantastic face.
Caption-O’Grady: But I haven’t seen my sister since she was sixteen walking out the backdoor with a backpack full of my favourite books and our father’s blood on her knuckles.
3. We pan back further to see this woman, Eric’s sister, walking across a snow field. She has a backpack on her back and all sorts of field gear strapped to her – crazy binoculars, one of those stupid trench digging tools, some rope, and plenty of pouches.
Caption-O’Grady: I haven’t even said hello to her yet and I feel bad about that.
4. We have panned back further. Eric’s sister is walking away from us now, we can see a large HYDRA symbol on her backpack, and in the distance there is a helicarrier crashed into the frozen tundra of northern Norway.
Caption-O’Grady: I’m just trying to find the right time.
Caption-O’Grady: The right words.
Caption-O’Grady: The right weapon.
For the record, his sister’s name is Erica. She’s a complete bad ass, she’s a hell of a lot of fun, and I wish I could write so much more of her.
I miss The Irredeemable Ant-Man.
Oh, and this script was a killer to write. It must have gone through about half a dozen very different drafts. They all just sucked from inception and then I finally lucked onto this concept which I’m pretty happy with. I often want my thoughtballoons pieces to act like a one page ad, and I’d totally send this page out to every website to promote me relaunching The Irredeemable Ant-Man. If I also had my druthers, Declan Shalvey would be drawing this with me. Damn. Life will never actually get that good, how lame.
I miss The Irredeemable Ant-Man.
Oh, and this script was a killer to write. It must have gone through about half a dozen very different drafts. They all just sucked from inception and then I finally lucked onto this concept which I’m pretty happy with. I often want my thoughtballoons pieces to act like a one page ad, and I’d totally send this page out to every website to promote me relaunching The Irredeemable Ant-Man. If I also had my druthers, Declan Shalvey would be drawing this with me. Damn. Life will never actually get that good, how lame.
This is indeed a return to form. Really great page!
ReplyDeleteJust for the record though, you can't "pan back". Panning is a sideways motion, either turning on an axis or tracking parallel to the subject ;)
Thanks, Danial.
ReplyDeleteAnd I actually don't think that's the first time you've called me on that, ha. I'm sticking to it, damn you and your camera knowledge!
Yeah, I agree. Great script, man.
ReplyDeleteI think you will find the term you were looking for is 'pull'.
Ryan you picked the character I would have picked ever given the chance, so a tip of the hat to you on that firstly.
ReplyDeleteSecond, I am in love with this page. For me it captures everything that I loved about the Irredeemable Ant-Man book. Eric is funny, dark and a little conflicted which is just how he is. Then the scene is just great I can picture the page just looking gorgeous.
My protest to get you writing this book starts here.
Cool bait & switch, Ryan, perfectly paced. And obviously, you got the voice down pat.
ReplyDeleteDid he expose his nude ant form to the blind person???
ReplyDeleteSame as above!!!!!
Great page this week!
ReplyDeleteI can't really say much more than that. It draws you in, the pacing is great and I WANT to see the next page. Good stuff!