Sunday, January 29, 2012

Indiana Jones- Indiana Jones and The Obelisk of Axum- Dan Hill

I tried to go for fancy, I tried to make clever allusions to the rise and fall of empires. In the end I stripped it all back and just went for something that hopefully captures the tone of what I love best about the character and the franchise. Admittedly the scene is something of a homage.

For the others taking a crack (no pun intended) at this weeks character I heartily recommend putting that John Williams score on, letting it wash through you and then writing away.

Indiana Jones and the Obelisk of Axum

Page 1- Six Panels

1.1
We OPEN on a CLOSE UP of INDIANA JONES locking lips with PROFESSOR BRUNILDA SPECCHIO.

Brunilda is in her late twenties with long black hair, brown eyes and cheek bones to die for. She’s wearing a khaki shirt, a pair of combat trousers (desert camouflage) and brown leather boots.

Indy’s eyes are wide. He's taken aback by the kiss slightly.

NO COPY

1.2
The pair part with Brunilda breaking out into a gloating smile. Indy smirks, adjusting his hat slightly.

BRUNILDA
I take what I want.

INDY
No kidding.

1.3
WIDE PANEL: We ZOOM OUT to show Indy and Brunilda are atop a truck (http://www.flamesofwar.com/hobby.aspx?art_id=1266) as it speeds along a desert road somewhere in Ethiopia.

Climbing up the sides of the truck and out of its rear are a number of Italian soldiers, all with machine guns slung over their backs.

They look like they mean business.

CAPTION
Near Axum, Ethiopia. February, 1937.

INDY
But you're stealing a 78 foot tall obelisk, Brunilda.
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Did you think I wouldn't notice?

BRUNILDA
The spoils of war.
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The New Roman Empire takes what it wants too.

1.4
CLOSE UP again on Brunilda as she pulls Indy towards her by his collar with both hands.

Indy is all smiles.

BRUNILDA
I won’t be denied.

1.5
ZOOM IN on the pair as Brunilda comes in for a farewell kiss.

BRUNILDA
Arrivederci, Indiana Jones.

1.6
WIDE PANEL. Brunilda turns around suddenly looking towards the lead truck in the convoy in the background of the panel. The truck explodes, shooting into the air, flames and debris shooting off in all directions.

Some of the soldiers who have managed to climb onto the top of the moving truck can only look in the direction of the explosion with horror and surprise.

SFX
KTOOOOOOM!

BRUNILDA
Porca vacca!

1.7
INSET PANEL. CLOSE UP on Indy’s face, smirking.

INDY (to himself)
Sallah, I could kiss you.

5 comments:

  1. You got the voice spot on and your descriptions just screamed Harrison Ford. That's all you needed.

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  2. This page has all the feel and tone of the Indy movies, romance, action, adventure and sexy ladies. Fun and tightly written. Great way to start a new week.

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  3. Love it! As Rol says, your voice and descriptions are spot on. It's amazing how much Indiana Jones you've managed to pack into one page. Everything from the kiss, to the "New Roman Empire", to the sudden explosion is exactly what this page needed. Great stuff, Dan!

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  4. There's a lot on this page but I can see it fitting - with the right artist. Is Yu available? I dug the New Roman Empire reference. Very tidy.

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  5. Yeah, great work Dan. Hit all the spots. Well done.

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