Sunday, January 22, 2012

Why Harry Osborn?


Because he died and then came back to life! How many of your favourite super heroes or villains can claim that, huh? Oh...wait.

Harry is such a diverse and insecure character. Even before his father took up the mantle of the Goblin, Harry was striving to gain his father’s approval. He never did.

A life of drug addiction, self worth and confidence issues, and the death of his dad tipped Osborn over the edge, and he became the third Green Goblin.

Unlike his pops, Harry tortured Peter Parker through psychological means. He followed an unconstumed Peter on the street, gliding behind him. He hinted to Peter that he would hurt his own family. Hell, he even created robot replicas of Peter’s parents and sent him all moody and broody – which lead into the clone saga.

Since coming back from the dead (cos he was healed by the goblin formula that heals his father – even though the thing that killed him originally was the goblin formula he fiddled with and took....yup) Harry has been a bit more subdued. When he’s not on the run with his half goblin half human son Stan, Harry can be seen using a taser to shock former police officers (even though he has enhanced strength) or running a coffee shop (even if he doesn’t know the ideal extraction times and dose levels for an Ethiopian Guji Sidamo five days off the roast).

Have fun with Harry Osborn this week – no one else seems to.

14 comments:

  1. Each Day, A Reminder Of What It Takes
    by: zu

    Six panel grid. Harry Osborn works at a coffee house, yes? He's just trying to stay out of his father's path. I see Harry who is self-aware enough to know that characters in superhero comics never truly leave behind their costumes. He, of course, doesn't want to become a Goblin again. Instead, he runs a coffee shop.


    1.1 Harry opening the door to whatever his coffee shop is. The lights are off inside.
    CAPTION: 4:45 a.m.
    NARRATION: As a long-time resident of the City, I've survived everything from Dr. Doom to the Shocker.

    1.2 Harry putting pastries inside of a pastry case.
    CAPTION: 5:05 a.m.
    NARRATION: So I can tell you, definitively, that there's only one thing here that is infrequent and atypical.

    1.3 Harry carrying lots of gallons of milk inside the place.
    CAPTION: 5:15 a.m.
    NARRATION: A clean break.

    1.4 Through the glass on the outside of the storefront, we see Harry scooping coffee beans into a grinder. (There should also be a sign with hours that says Opens at 5:30, M-F.)
    CAPTION: 5:20 a.m.
    NARRATION: Everyone returns to something, and it's only a few that don't.

    1.5 Harry, handing off a comically large cup of coffee to Ben Urich. (Ben would be kind enough to leave a tip in the jar, likely a fiver.)
    CAPTION: 5:32 a.m.
    NARRATION: How do they do it? Simple: Hard work.

    1.6 From the customer's perspective: Harry Osborn, behind an expresso machine, making a drink.
    CAPTION: 5:45 a.m.
    NARRATION: Have a plan. Take small steps to ensure its success each day. Repeat. Remember: This is always better than the alternative.

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    1. zu, I really dig the vibe on this page. Sounds just like an AA mantra and that's perfect.

      I also like that Ben is up so early - damn straight he is, hardest working journo in the whole town.

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  2. And there we have the inverse of Ben's tale. A nicely handled piece with Harry using his job to stay on the straight and narrow. In the end though, suspect customer service would make supervillains out of all of us.

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  3. Nice work.

    Nothing too flashy but a solid character piece dealing with the struggle within.

    I like it.

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  4. Really nice character work here, zu. I must admit that I'm not terribly familiar with Harry in the comics, but your piece (and the others put up thus far) makes me want to know him better, which is always a good thing.

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  5. Great work here. I like that his job is simply to preoccupy his mind. A fail safe to ensure that he doesn't return to his previous life. A distraction. Great work.

    Now, as for the coffee thing (you bring up coffee in a story, I'm going to be all over it)
    Firstly, expresso is a made up word by chains who have no idea what they are talking about. It is 'espresso', Italian for 'fast' or 'quick'. In Italy, patrons are charged extra for seating, so they order an espresso to drink at the bar and be on their way. In modern times, coffee snobs order espresso and ristretto to get a taste of the bean's profile, and to see if the barista is extracting it under the correct conditions.

    If Harry was any kind of coffee geek, he would not be scooping the beans into the hopper of the grinder. Rather, he would be filling it from the vacuum sealed bag. This is to ensure that the beans would not stale by being exposed to air, heat, light and moisture. Of course, Harry has been written in having no idea on speciality coffee, so I'll forgive this one :P


    I'm assuming this will be the last time anyone uses coffee in a script...right? :)

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  6. Considering my own coffee love / addiction, I doubt that. Thanks also for the potted history, Ben - I do so hate it when people say "expresso".

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  7. Strong page Zu. A true character study, for me the captions and timings really sell me on the idea of a man who needs constant distractions to keep him on the straight and narrow.

    For me it reads like a guy recovering from a bad habit, and these no worse habit than being a super villain.

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  8. Harry Osborn – Into The Sun - Shaun Richens.

    The page is made up of 5 panels. The first 3 make up the top row and are all equal sizes. The 4th and 5th are both page wide panels about the same size the 5th slightly bigger.

    1. Harry Osborn walks down a street in the sinking sun of the evening. It is lightly raining. He has his back to us hands in his jacket pockets looking down.

    2. He Walks left along the panel. We see him from the side, a look of sadness across his face.

    3. Harry has stopped on a corner in the rain and is looking down into the street.

    4. We are looking over Harrys shoulder framed to the right of the panel. He is looking down into a puddle in the road, the reflection of Green Goblin looking back at him in the dirty rippling surface.

    CAPTION HARRY: NO MATTER HOW FAR YOU GO YOU CAN NEVER ESCAPE YOUR PAST…

    5. From behind Harry in silhouette. He looks down the long road in front of him buildings either side of him, the huge bright mass of the sun the focal point of the panel as it sets in the horizon. Everything in the panel should be in blacks and greys apart from oranges and reds and hints of purple in the sun.

    CAPTION HARRY: ALL YOU CAN DO IS HOPE FOR A BRIGHTER FUTURE.

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    1. Defeintely a last page. Although I final splash page after this of Harry shown holding a Spidey mask in his bloodied fists would be awesome...

      Anyway, I like this, and the lack of captions totally works. Keeps it tight.

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  9. This one has a sense of finality about it. I can see it being the last page of a storyline - however it would probably work better with Panel 5 being a splash.
    My only nit picky remark would be it doesn't really sound much like Harry, but as I have not read the previous pages to the story, I can;t be sure that Harry has not had some kind of epiphany or change of thought towards his life. Harry has never been a philosophical character, but the change shown here intrigues me as to why he is now.

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  10. Solid page, sets a tone well.

    However I tend to agree with Ben on Harry's captions/voice here in that it doesn't quite ring true.

    You could probably take away the captions and the page would work really well.

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  11. Based on the feedback from everyone here is a reworked darker version of my page. Thoughts would be awesome...

    Harry Osborn – Fear and Loathing With Harry Osborn. - Shaun Richens.

    The page is made up of 5 panels. The first 3 make up the top row and are all equal sizes. Panel 4 is a page wide panel. Panels 5 and 6 make up the bottom row, panel 6 being the bigger of the two.

    1. Harry Osborn walks down a street in the sinking sun of the evening. It is lightly raining. He has his back to us hands in his jacket pockets looking down.

    2. He Walks left along the panel. We see him from the side, a look of sadness across his face.

    3. Harry has stopped on a corner not even caring that it’s raining. He is looking down into the street.

    4. We are looking over Harrys shoulder framed to the right of the panel. He is looking down into a puddle in the road, the reflection of Green Goblin looking back at him in the dirty rippling surface.

    5. A close up on Harrys hand, it is clenched so tightly in a fist that he has cut his hand we can see it dripping out between his knuckles.

    6. A shoulders up shot of Harry, his eyes darkened in shadow, a menacing smile spread across his face.

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  12. Is it possible to clench your fist so tightly that you cut your hand? Wow. I'm off to try that now.

    Other than that, I love the visuals here, Shaun (on both drafts of the script).

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