Sunday, January 15, 2012

Winter Soldier - Commander in Chief - Simon McDonald

WINTER SOLDIER

COMMANDER IN CHIEF
PART 1 [of 4]

PAGE 20

PANEL ONE
Inside the Oval Office, Captain America has his hand clasped around the President’s arm, pinning it to the desk, preventing POTUS from lifting the cordless red telephone to his ear Outrage is plastered on POTUS’ face, his eyes wide, struggling to comprehend why the SHIELD agents posted around him aren’t responding to the threat.

CAPTAIN AMERICA
Put him in holding.

POTUS
What - - !
You can’t - - !



PANEL TWO
In the foreground of the panel, Captain America stares out the window at the White House grounds, his iconic shield strapped to his back. In the background, POTUS is being led away, visibly agitated, equally powerless.

CAPTAIN AMERICA
I can.

POTUS
Let go of me - !

PANEL THREE
POTUS is shoved into a White House board room where other members of the President’s cabinet and staff are seated, surrounded by armed SHIELD agents, all stone-faced.

SHIELD AGENT
Inside!

POTUS
Huff!

PANEL FOUR
The SHIELD agent returns to the Oval Office as Captain America faces of his men, his arms crossed.


CAPTAIN AMERICA [1]
Gentlemen.

CAPTAIN AMERICA [2]
The White House is ours.


PANEL FIVE
Cut to the lower levels of the White House, beneath the White House. In a scene intentionally reminiscent of the panel of Wolverine in Uncanny X-Men#133, Winter Soldier stands over the unconscious bodies of three enemy SHIELD agents. He’s battered and bruised – and determined.

WINTER SOLDIER
My turn.

CAPTION
“The single greatest fear that America faces today is that its military forces no longer tolerate the continuing incompetence of its civilian leadership.”
Mr George K. Suskind
Defence Intelligence Agency
Evidence given before the House Sub-committee on the Armed Forces, 22nd July 1996

6 comments:

  1. The first four panels completely throw me. The final panel completely reels me in.

    I want to know what's up with Cap...and I want to know what Barnes is going to do about it.

    Very tidy start to the week.

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  2. Nice premise and those first few panels really do draw you in.

    The premise reminded me a bit of the Business Plot. Swap out General Butler for Cap and it'd make a neat story.

    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Business_Plot

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  3. Wonderful premise, has that great balance of Cap as the villain of the pieces yet keeping him perfectly in character, doing what he feels he must for the greater good.

    Panels 2 and 5 did a lot for me. The image of Cap standing tall in the white house is a striking image and Winter Solider entering the fray in the final panel is just awesome.

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  4. Whoa. That was terrific. I agree with Shaun that Cap's coup seems surprisingly in-character, and that last panel is what really makes the page. I'm always impressed with appropriate quotations, so points for that.

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  5. Love the use of the quote as a way of adding legitimacy to the story. Ryan is right in that the first four panels you are wondering what in the hell is going on. Is Cap the bad guy, or the President? The answer is all too clear at the end. Great work.

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  6. I loved this. It reminded me of Aaron Sorkin's final season closing cliffhanger as writer of The West Wing where he basically had John Goodman march into the Oval Office and do pretty much exactly what Cap did here. Excellent stuff.

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