(6 Panels)
Panel 1: WINTER SOLDIER hides behind cover somewhere in RUSSIA, weapon armed. In the background, OMEGA RED is approaching, tentacles out and ready to strike.
OMEGA RED:
WINTER SOLDIER:
Panel 2: OMEGA RED knocks away WINTER SOLDIER’s cover with one of his tentacles. WINTER SOLDIER starts to move and brings his rifle up to aim it at OMEGA RED.
OMEGA RED:
Panel 3: One of OMEGA RED’s tentacles wraps itself around WINTER SOLDIER.
OMEGA RED:
Panel 4: WINTER SOLDIER grabs part of OMEGA RED’s tentacle with his metal ROBO-ARM OF DOOM. It starts to cause an electrical surge that starts from the hand and feeds out.
SFX: (Surge) ZxxzZ!
WINTER SOLDIER:
Panel 5: The surge starts a feedback loop, which spreads out from WINTER SOLDIER’s ROBO-ARM OF DOOM and flows back to OMEGA RED, electrocuting him.
SFX: bzzzZZAAKXZ!
OMEGA RED: GUAAAAAAAH!
Panel 6: WINTER SOLDIER stands over a half-unconscious OMEGA RED. He has a weapon pointed down at OMEGA RED, ready to kill him if he tries anything.
WINTER SOLDIER: <
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Mk the Dialogue seems to have not posted with the rest of the script? Any chance of a repost?
ReplyDeleteHowever even without the dialogue the action reads really well. Its a fun one on one action movie type of battle with a cool use of winter soldiers robotic arm.
There. It should be fixed now. :-)
ReplyDeleteA nice action page with an intriguing hook. You give good sfx too, MK.
ReplyDeleteLove the sfx, MK. It's something that I always struggle with and you nail it here, providing an excellent complement to the action you've set up here. Nice.
ReplyDeleteLoooooove the dialogue here. For me, it reads in semi-broken English. I don't know why, but I really enjoy that.
ReplyDelete@ Grant: As far as SFX go, I tend to go about it imagining what I think something should sound like, and then try to spell the sounds out to make a quasi-onomatopoeia out of it.
ReplyDeleteNice tip on SFX. I'll keep that advice in mind.
ReplyDeleteI actually liked the version without the dialogue.
But I'm weird. Solid page!