Wednesday, February 22, 2012

Ghost Rider – And Now for Something Completely Different - MK Stangeland Jr.

(If this idea has been used before, then I apologize. I don’t have much familiarity with the character, so any similarities this has to any existing Ghost Rider comics is purely coincidental.)

(6 Panels)

Panel 1: JOHNNY BLAZE is on his bike on the side of the road, and looks annoyed. He doesn’t look like GHOST RIDER at the moment. Behind him, a Motorcycle Cop has parked his bike, and the cop – OFFICER JONES (No Reference) - is standing next to JOHNNY BLAZE.

JOHNNY BLAZE: Something wrong, officer?

OFFICER JONES: Sure is. Where’s your helmet?

Panel 2: JOHNNY BLAZE isn’t looking at OFFICER JONES, but has a very annoyed look on his face – the kind that says ‘why am I putting up with this?’

OFFICER JONES is pulling his ticket book out of its pouch.

JOHNNY BLAZE: I don’t wear one.

OFFICER JONES (1): tisk, tisk

OFFICER JONES (2): Can’t have you riding around without a helmet, can we?

Panel 3: There’s a fire that’s starting to light up in JOHNNY BLAZE’s eyes.

OFFICER JONES: Mr…?

JOHNNY BLAZE: Rider.

OFFICER JONES: Alright, Mr. Rider. Can I see your license and registration, please?

Panel 4: JOHNNY BLAZE is looking up at OFFICER JONES.

JOHNNY BLAZE: Don’t you have anyone better to go ticket?

OFFICER JONES: Sorry, Mr. Rider, but law’s the law, and it’s for…

Panel 5: JOHNNY BLAZE has lit up and become GHOST RIDER. OFFICER JONES is rather shocked by this turn of events.

SFX: (From JOHNNY BLAZE transforming into GHOST RIDER) gghhhhuuuFF!!!

GHOST RIDER: It’s for what?

OFFICER JONES: GUAH!

Panel 6: OFFICER JONES has fallen to the ground in surprise. Panel looks up as GHOST RIDER looks down on OFFICER JONES.

GHOST RIDER (2): For my own good? My own safety?

(END PAGE)

6 comments:

  1. Office Jones was a fun jerk character and I really enjoyed that about the page. His dialogue in panel 2 was just right for that kind of character, the tisk tisk being the perfect smug remark to annoy anyone especially someone like Johnny Blaze.

    My only real issue with the page is the ending, I felt like the dialogue wasn't the strongest way to end a page.

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  2. This starts offthe feeling of a nice little done-in-one, MK, which I'll never complain about, but the tone shifts unexpectedly in those last two panels, which threw me off. Everything seemed pretty lighthearted and then Ghost Rider finishes things off looking like he's going to curb stomp Jones, which didn't feel quite right to me. Also, maybe a bit of an overreaction on Ghost Rider's part.

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  3. I'll admit this is among some of my weakest work. I liked the idea when it first came to me, but I think it was a case of sounding a lot better in my head than it came out on the page. The more I read it, the less I like it, and I count it as a weak point where I let the pressures of time get to me.

    So everything you people say about the weaknesses of this script is probably more than true.

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  4. It's a fun concept but it does kind of go a bit dark in those last panel. Which, as Grant mentioned, does play with your noggin a bit.

    Structurally sound, but tonally a bit of a muddle.

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  5. I echo the previous comments, but could see that darkness working at the end if it was a little more OTT and gleefully insane. Nice concept anyway and I don't think I've seen that before.

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  6. I don't think it was weak. If anything I would have left the last panel. Have the officer slowly react to Johnny turning into the rider, then kind of dumbfounded when it happens.

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