Monday, March 19, 2012

Hawkeye - Precision - Ryan K Lindsay

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1. Hawkeye stands atop Avengers Tower, his bow is trained out into the horizon, his arrow is loaded.
Caption1: "Clint has been on the roof for hours."

2. Clint shoots the arrow out into the distance.

Caption: "Is he actually having any success?"
Caption2: "I don't want to cover some law suit because a bus driver takes one of his arrows to the face while taking a bunch of school kids back to the orphanage."

3. Clint is grabbing another arrow from his quiver.

Caption1: "Every single arrow is accounted for with the tracking software and not one has been wasted. Nothing below a felony, we can most likely recover the arrows from Saint Vincent's tomorrow."

4. Clint aims the arrow right at us.

Caption2: "So...he's upset but at least he's taking it out on criminals and not us."
Caption1: "You mean, not you."



Yeah, I pretty much don't get Clint Barton as a character.  I do not see the allure. I got an idea that him slinging arrows off the building into the NYC skyline and still nailing only criminals might be fun. And it is fun, but even I don't care.

Man, all I can say is...next!

4 comments:

  1. This is just what the site should be used for Ryan. It is a simple little idea which works well for the character. It is easy to put across and only needs the one page, no more no less. Good little script.

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  2. I'm with you on this one, Ryan. I found it hard to find an in to the character, though I guess I do see his appeal.

    That said, the script had some elements of humour that stood out. Not excellent, but not bad either.

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  3. Hmm. Looks like Blogger swallowed the comment I put here a moment ago. Bah!

    Like you, Ryan, I don't really 'get' Hawkeye (though I do see his appeal).

    That said, the script here did have some humour in it. Not great. But not bad either.

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  4. Despite your lack of enthusiasm for Clint (and I can't blame you on that one), I think this is a solid little page. It's a simple concept, but I admire your execution here. It's restrained, with just enough offered to pique the reader's interest. It's that final line that does it for me.

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