Why Hawkeye? Well, why don’t we ask Hawkeye himself, Mr Clint Barton!
“Whaddya mean you don’t know why I was chosen? I’m the best there is at what I do – shotting arrows. Sure, I used to be a crook, turning to a life of crime for money instead of going to the Olympics and becoming world famous but I was young(er) back then.
And it paid off – the Avengers saw some good in me and asked me to join their ranks. Now I travel the globe, doing what Avengers do best....Avengering. Some may say that I am a secondary character, that my multi-faceted arrows are nothing but a cheap way to get out of a tight situation. Well, to those people I say YOUR MOTHER!
Now if you excuse me, I have to go and continue working on my next brilliant arrow invention – a shark repellent arrow.”
You had to ask, huh?
HAWKEYE and his apple-cheeked West Coast Avengers in A GAME OF CHANCE
ReplyDeleteHawkeye and the West Coast Avengers have been trapped in Murderworld and separated from each other, and the issue this page is in would be focused on Hawkeye rejoining the others.
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Panel 1: Hawkeye awakes in the middle of a long boardwalk, with rows of games on each side- the kind where you throw a ball and try to knock down a stack of bottles or somesuch.
THOUGHT BALLOON(HAWKEYE): AH, MY HEAD. MY WEAPONS ARE GONE TOO. THAT LOUSY ARCADE
Panel 2: Hawkeye, rubbing his aching head, walks towards the end of the boardwalk
THOUGHT BALLOON(HAWKEYE): THESE GAMES--IF IT'S ANYTHING LIKE THE CARNIVALS I GREW UP WITH, THEY'RE GONNA BE RIGGED.
THOUGHT BALLOON(HAWKEYE): BUT THIS IS ARCADE'S PLACE, SO THEY'RE ALMOST CERTAINLY LETHAL.
Panel 3: Hawkeye notices an archery game.
THOUGHT BALLOON(HAWKEYE): I KNOW I SHOULDN'T, BUT HEY, I'LL NEED A BOW, AND THIS SEEMS THE EASIEST WAY TO GET ONE HERE.
Panel 4: Hawkeye grabs the bow and 5 arrows on the counter of the archery game booth, and the robot manning the booth is talking to him.
HAWKEYE: HEY, TIN MAN, HOW MUCH A GAME?
ROBOT: IT'S FREE PARDNER... JUST BE CAREFUL WITH THE ARROWS--
SFX:K-KLK!
Panel 4: from the robot's point of view as Hawkeye turns around in shock, and all the robots manning the boardwalk games have aimed at Hawkeye from their booths. There's one with a few baseballs, a few with pellet guns, at least one with a bow, and a few with bladed ring toss rings.
ROBOT: YER GONNA NEED 'EM! AHAHAHAHA!
Great old school feel to this page. The thought balloons had a wonderful retro feel to them and it added a nice tone of classic adventure to the piece. The fair game setting was a really interesting one and would look great on the page. Good work.
DeleteI really liked this page. It was a nice tough to have the carnival atmosphere and take Clint back his roots.
DeleteAlso, as Shaun said, the captions and setting evoke a real 'classic' tone. Good job!
"Hawkeye: Hits the Spot"
ReplyDeleteSET-UP: Hawkeye has been fighting the supervillain The Spot -- http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Spot_(comics) -- Every time Hawkeye fires an arrow at the Spot, he uses one of his portals to redirect the arrow somewhere else. They are on a rooftop, as Hawkeye chases the Spot from a crime scene.
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1) Tight on Hawkeye's quiver from behind. There is only one arrow left. He is reaching for it.
HAWKEYE (CAP): Down to my last one...
2) Tight on Hawkeye. Looking down his arrow as he nocks it against his bow, drawing the string tightly, concentration on his face.
HAWKEYE (CAP): Here goes something...
3) Close up of Hawkeye's hand. He has released the string.
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4) Large panel. The Spot, two or three rooftops away (maybe with Hawkeye visible in the background), with Hawkeye's arrow shooting in and out various portals on his body, ricocheting wildly off objects on the roof (watertower, air vents, etc.). The arrow's bizarre path culminates in a trajectory towards Spot's head.
NO DIALOGUE
5) Insert. The arrow hitting Spot on the head (it is an "impact" arrow, for concussing).
SFX: THUNK
6) Insert. Close-up of Hawkeye's shit-eating grin.
HAWKEYE (CAP): That hits the spot.
END OF PAGE.
Bloody great page J.D. The choice in villain is spot on (pardon the pun) his power set making for a really great set up with Hawkeye, your choice of shots for the opening panels is strong as well. Plus you end on a cheesy yet great one liner. My only side note would be perhaps shortening the first caption to just read - Last one... makes the page flow slightly faster and smoother and that is what you want for this kind of action scene. Awesome page though man.
DeleteExcellent page.
DeleteGreat choice of villain, the tension builds on the page and it culminates in a nice (and cheesy-- and I mean that in the best possible way), quippy one liner.
Thanks for the feedback, gentlemen!
DeleteHAWKEYE guest-stars in Spider-Man: REDEMPTION ROAD
ReplyDeleteThe Premise is this (it's been rolling in my head for about a year): Electro finds out he has a daughter, and when he gets out of prison, he really tries to go straight after his baby girl's mom dies. Desperate, he goes back to his old ways and gets caught by Spidey and Hawkeye during an armoured car heist. Hawkeye secures him, and instead of calling the authorities, offers to make Electro an Avenger.
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Spidey and Hawkeye are now standing on a roof for some privacy. Electro is bound and sitting.
Panel 1:
SPIDEY (incredulous): What?!?
HAWKEYE: I'm serious, Max. Position's yours if you want it. We could always use someone with your firepower...
Panel 2:
SPIDEY (pleading with Hawkeye): Dude! Do you know how many rounds I've gone with this jamoke?!? He's a career criminal!
HAWKEYE: So was I.
Panel 3: Hawkeye squatting down on his toes, so that he's eye to eye with Electro.
HAWKEYE: I was a two-bit thief with a third rate gimmick who thought he could go toe-to-toe with Iron Man. I was an idiot.
HAWKEYE: And then one day, when him and Thor and Ant-or-Giant-Man all cut and run, Captain America came to me and asked him to save the world.
HAWKEYE: Me, and Magneto's kids.
Panel 4: Electro's face - he looks torn.
HAWKEYE: You think about that for a sec. The trust, the faith that took. To look at an Olympic-sized failure and two budding terrorists, and ask them to be better.
HAWKEYE: You think of the fecal matter I had to swallow from the press, from old punk buddies, from my probation officer, until I had proved myself not just as a hero, but an Avenger. Big Time.
HAWKEYE: Think about your daughter. Do you want to see her taken by Social Services, visiting you from the other side of a plexiglass window? Or do you want to be a real father?
Panel 5: Hawkeye leans in on Electro closer. Electro is beginning to break.
HAWKEYE: You remember when you realized your mom didn't want you, when she left you, first from the heart, then the room. I went through that same thing. Your baby's an innocent. It's your responsibility to protect her.
Panel 6: Hawkeye from Electro's POV, towering over him.
HAWKEYE: That's what we do. We protect the innocent. If we can't, we avenge them.
HAWKEYE: I believe in you, Max. Like Cap believed in me.
HAWKEYE: Except I don't want you to prove you're a hero. I want you to prove to me you're a man.
(Yeah, I know it's text heavy, but I always thought that this would eventually be Hawkeye's role, using his example to help other hard-luck supers. Just a thought...)
Truly great premise. It makes really great use of Hawkeye's origin and character growth to tell a compelling new tale. I also dig your choice of super villain to have him try and save. Also the fact you leave it open ended is a nice hook, I am interested to see where this would go.
DeleteThe only point I would make is that like you said, it is a little text heavy but with a few tweaks and the right artist could make for a great page.
Thank you very much. This is turning out to be a real blast. Thanks for the open call.
DeleteI read this the other day and left feedback but it looks like it hasn't posted.
DeleteI like the concept of Clint recruiting those who are looking for redemption.
Solid character-centric script.
I love who you chose and the overarching mood of redemption. Who would've drawn a parallel of Hawkeye and Elctro? I love it. honestly, regarding the dialog quantity, I think the whole thing almost has a modern Silver Age feel, if that makes sense
DeleteMy Arrow's Aim
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I've been listening to Mark Waid talk about Golden and Silver Age issues, so this one came out as a tip of the cap and a bit of bow for two masters.
This is a full page. Hawkeye looks up to see laid out, in front of him, a massive labyrinth, the scale of which is so large, he can't see any side of it. Go epic tier on this one. Go beyond epic tier. One page of uncountable deathtraps, tigers, quicksand, menacing courtyards, drinking troughs, sinister fountains and mirrors that extend farther than Hawkeye's eyes can see.
It goes:
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HAWKEYE: I should have known the House of Asterion was a trap!
TEASER: Next issue: Tigers! Mirrors! A Minotaur!
Big brash plash page. A very nice take on a silver age last page. And the teaser seems spot on. This would be a heck of a page to see, good to see writers going big on the ideas. Nice work.
DeleteYou've gone the style over substance route here but I think it's a pretty good splash page and I think it fits with the Silver Age tone you're going for.
DeleteHAWKEYE – HOW THE TABLES HAVE TURNED
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Three rows with 2 panels in first two rows and last panel as last row. Should be set at the Avengers Academy/WCA headquarters. This particular scene takes place in a training area with raised walls spread around to serve as cover.
PANEL 1 – Hawkeye dives to wall for cover dodging a bolt of lightning.
Striker (off-panel): Be glad I’m going easy on ya, gramps!
PANEL 2 – Striker is shown with his hands still slightly discharging electricity. He has a very smug look on his face.
Striker: Once everyone sees me show you up in this training session, they’ll have to make me an Avenger!
PANEL 3 – Hawkeye is behind cover with some sort
of trick arrow ready in his bow. He is slightly irritated.
Hawkeye (thought balloon): Please tell me I wasn’t this conceited before.
PANEL 4 – Flashback panel of Hawkeye in classic costume arguing with Captain America. Used Avengers 20 and 21 as reference. Tweaked some of the dialogue from both into one panel.
Captain America: I’ve had it with your complaints about my leadership, feather-brain!
Hawkeye: Well, maybe it’s time you stepped down you overrated has-been!
PANEL 5 – Hawkeye has his head down in shame as Striker is taunting in the background.
Hawkeye (thought balloon): Oh…right.
Striker: First comes the action figures, then the heart-breaking biography, and finally the movie!
I liked the concept of the page and I think the dialogue as a whole had a nice 'old school' feel to it (I'm not sure if that's what you were going for).
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