Wednesday, May 16, 2012

Tony Chu – Eat ‘It – MK Stangeland Jr.

(6 Panels)

Panel 1: TONY CHU is at his desk, but looks up as AMELIA MINTZ enters through a nearby door.

AMELIA MINTZ: I have good news and bad new.

Panel 2: AMELIA MINTZ looks nervous as she tries to explain the current situation.

AMELIA MINTZ (1): They finally found Mr. G.

TONY CHU: And the bad news is?

AMELIA MINTZ (2): He was in Florida.

Panel 3: TONY looks at AMELIA with a confused look.

TONY CHU: How is that…

AMELIA MINTZ: An alligator found him first.

Panel 4: Beat panel. TONY and AMELIA look at each other.

Panel 5: TONY slumps back into his chair.

TONY CHU: And the alligator already ate him?


TONY CHU: Was he still inside the alligator?


Panel 6: TONY slouches in his chair, eyes closed as he contemplates what it means.

TONY CHU: So you’re telling me he’s now…


TONY CHU: And the only way to interrogate him now is…

AMELIA MINTZ: As far as they’re aware.


(By far not one of my favorite or better-written scripts. And for that I apologize in advance.)


  1. Really liked how you worded your dialogue only hinting at the nature of the task Tony was faced with, I could have been really crudely handled and but you managed to avoid that.

  2. Yep, the dialogue here is on the money. It flows and it SOUNDS like dialogue with Amelia cutting off Tony, etc.


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