(JONAH HEX has
traveled out to the far west hunting
the bounty of a man carrying the identity of ‘Zorro’. After actually meeting
the man and agreeing to help rather than hunt him, the both of them have ninjas
sent after them by the people who Hex was originally working for.)
(7 Panels)
Panel 1: Panel is behind ZORRO and JONAH HEX as they
ride on horseback away from the panel. They look behind them to see their
pursuers.
SFX: tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum
Panel 2: Image at the panel should be rotated at a
slight angle. We see the people chasing ZORRO and JONAH HEX – it’s roughly a
dozen ninjas riding on horseback.
These ninjas, however,
are wearing slightly modified outfits that are better suited for the hotter
climate of California. Their costumes are white instead of black, the very top
of their heads are exposed to let their hair hang out (though their masks still
cover their faces), and their sleeves are absent from their shoulder to their
upper forearm.
Two of the ninjas are
seen reloading crossbows, one is retrieving Shuriken ninja stars, and the rest
are drawing ninja swords.
SFX: (Spread out
across the panel amongst the ninjas who are drawing their swords) Sh-ring!
Shring! shhhhha-rING! shring! sha-ring!
SFX: tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum
Panel 3: ZORRO and JONAH HEX look to each other.
ZORRO: Not friends of yours, I presume?
JONAH HEX: I was goin’ to ask you the same thing.
SFX: tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum
Panel 4: JONAH HEX pulls out a revolver and holds it
aimed skyward.
JONAH HEX: We better loose these guys.
SFX: tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum
Panel 5: ZORRO pulls out his Rapier and holds it
skyward. He has a slightly crazy look of glee on his face.
ZORRO: Ah! But where would be the fun in that?!
SFX: Shhhha-HING!
SFX: tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum
Panel 6: ZORRO takes his horse into a tight turn as
he turns to face the enemy head on. His sword points downwards and the tip of
it just dips into the ground as he goes.
JONAH HEX turns and
looks after ZORRO with a look of shocked surprise.
ZORRO: HeYAH!
SFX: tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum
Panel 7: JONAH HEX has brought his gun arm down to
have both hands in control of his horse. He takes it into a turn to try to
follow after ZORRO.
JONAH HEX: (smaller
font and/or type size to emphasize that HEX is mostly muttering this under his
breath.) Crazy old man…
SFX: tha-ra-dum-tha-ra-dum
END PAGE
I like how well-paced this is. Another interesting crossover this week too, also ripe for ideas. I particularly liked how Panels 4 and 5 illustrate the differences between the two: Hex actively avoiding conflict (but still ready for it) and Zorro's thrill-seeking.
ReplyDeleteThe "theme tune" throughout is interesting too, but one of those things that might not work in practice.
Also; Old West ninjas? Has that been done before?! If not, it should!
It's actually meant to be the sound of the horses galloping. I can agree that it might not work as well in practice as it does in theory. Almost didn't use it all when I was originally writing the script, but I figured I'd give it a shot and see what happens.
DeleteI liked the horse galloping sounds. It struck me as yet another example of you being way better at SFX than me.
ReplyDeleteThe script also struck me as yet another example of your amazing ability to find awesome team-ups between our pick for the week and an appropriate partner. Zorro, indeed!
Another great mashup and combining of characters this week.
ReplyDeleteThis is well paced, with solid action and even some character beats playing into it all.