Thursday, July 5, 2012

Jonah Hex – Women Troubles – Shaun Richens.


Really sorry this didn't get put up last week. Had some massive trouble with my internet. However I didn't want to miss J.D's first pick so heres my little contribution to the week.


PAGE ONE

4 panels. 1,2,3 Are a top row, 4 takes up the rest of the page.

1. BLACK PANEL.

         NO COPY

2. This whole image is blurry as if someone is just opening their eyes and adjusting to the light. We can make out a pair of woman’s legs in fishnets, she is wearing high heels as well. The feet stand flat on the left hand edge of the panel and go up to the right hand side. As if someone is looking at the legs whilst lying on their side.

         NO COPY

3. Same as 2 but not blurry. 

WOMAN (Speech bubble coming from the top of her legs and written sideways to match)
Get him up.

4. We have pulled back from the first person view of Jonah Hex and we now see him propped up against the wall in a Saloon, his hands tied behind his back and his face slightly bruised and bloody. The woman standing in front of him is dressed in this, she has a huge grin on her and a shotgun cockily resting on her shoulder. A group of rough outlaws with bandanas covering the lower half of their faces stand around her like a pack of wolves waiting to get fed.

        JONAH
        Damn double crossing….

        WOMAN
Watch that tongue of yours Jonah, that’s what got you into this mess. 


4 comments:

  1. Dames. Ain't nothing but trouble.

    Nice opener; much like some of P&G's run. Makes me wanna know more.

    Better late than never. ;)

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    1. Thanks for the feedback buddy. Sorry again it was a late one. hope it was at least a little enjoyable to make up for the wait.

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  2. Well, I don't know if you meant it but that last line is just loaded with double entendre, ain't it?

    For that alone, kudos!

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  3. @Dan - Ha! Get your mind out of the gutter!

    I like this a lot, Shaun. It's a nice opener that, as JD points out, hooks the reader quite quickly. I really liked the top three panels from Jonah's point of view. A really nice way to let the reader learn at the same speed as their protagonist (and a nice effect)!

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