Friday, August 17, 2012

Captain Marvel - Don't Say It - Niel Jacoby

This takes place in the timeline from Avengers Forever where Genis-Vell is bonded to Rick Jones and is on the Avengers.

Panel 1: Carol and Genis-Vell are looking at something off-screen and are worried. They are in space.

Carol: WOW. THIS... THIS IS CERTAINLY SOMETHING.

Genis: YEAH.

Panel 2: same viewpoint as 1. Carol is determined, Genis is slightly flinching, like he knows something's about to happen, but he's still determined.

Carol: GOOD THING THIS IS...

Genis: YOU'RE NOT GOING TO SAY WHAT I THINK YOU'RE GOING TO SAY, ARE YOU?

Panel 3: this one should take up most of the page, as we zoom out and see the threat: Galactus now has the powers of Captain Universe.

Carol: ...A MARVEL TWO-ON-ONE!

Genis: OOF. AND I THOUGHT RICK HAD GROANERS.

2 comments:

  1. Panel 3 has a huge bombastic feel to it, which I really like, and is a good pay off for the set up you have.

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  2. Nice comedic tone with a great 'cosmic' and grandiose last panel.

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