Friday, August 3, 2012

Etrigan: First Day On The Job - Niel Jacoby

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Panel 1: Young Etrigan has just become a rhyming demon, and is being introduced to the ranks of the other rhymers by a head honcho demon, who should tower over the rest.

Head Honcho:
TO ETRIGAN, WHO'S NEW, I INTRODUCE
YOU DEMONS WHO ARE IN THE RHYMING GROUP.
YOU ALL, I HOPE, WILL FIND A SHARED ACCORD
A COMMON GOAL TO STRIVE TOGETHER TOWARD.
A RHYMING DEMON'S DUTY IS TO RHYME,
YOUR DUTY IS TO RHYME ALL OF THE TIME.

Panel 2: Close on young Etrigan, who is nervous.

Head Honcho(Off-Panel):
SO, ETRIGAN, PERHAPS YOU'D CARE TO TRY?

Panel 3: Etrigan is even more nervous.
Head Honcho(Off-Panel)
HURRY, BOY, MY PATIENCE'S END IS NIGH.

Inset Panel(inset into panel 3): Divided diagonally into 2. In one, Etrigan is thinking. In the second, a lick of demonic flame appears over his head, as he looks like he's had a great idea.

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Panel 4: Etrigan has put on a pair of demonic sunglasses, and is pointing at the assembled rhymers.

Etrigan:
ALL OF YOU RHYMERS, I'M QUITE GLAD TO MEET,
IF ONE OF YOU BAD SOULS... COULD PLEASE DROP ME A BEAT?

Panel 5: One of the rhymers starts beatboxing.

SFX:
PSH-A-TCH-PSHPSH-A-PSH-A-PSH-TCH
PSH-A-TCH-PSHPSH-A-PSH-A-PSH-TCH

Panel 6: Etrigan begins to rhyme, while the Head Honcho facepalms.

Etrigan:
WELL, MY NAME'S ETRIGAN AND I'M HERE TO SAY
I PLAN TO SERVE SATAN'S WHIMS IN A COOL NEW WAY
LUCIFER MAY BE THE PRINCE OF LIES,
BUT ETRIGAN IS THE KING OF FLY!

SFX: FTAP!

Panel 7: Close on Head Honcho, facepalming.

Etrigan(OP):
WHEN I SAY ETRIGAN, YOU SAY ETRIGAN!
WHEN YOU SAY ETRIGAN, I SAY ETRIGAN!
ETRIGAN!

[Crowd(OP):
ETRIGAN!

Etrigan(OP):
ETRIGAN!
(repeat and fade off-panel)]

Head Honcho:
OH MY LORD SATAN, THE BOY IS YOUNG, I KNOW,
BUT HE'S GOT SUCH A LONG, LONG WAY TO GO.

6 comments:

  1. Etrigan rapping. It seems so obvious in hindsight.

    Great little comedy piece.

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  2. Excellent!

    There was another entry on this page that pitted Etrigan against Van Helsing in an old school rap battle with MC Hammer reffing.

    That one was pretty good but I think this one was more of a fun read.

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  3. Niel the page made me smile, then we hit panel 5 for some beat boxing and I couldn't help but laugh. Then when we fade out on a crowd and Etrigan back and forth I had to hit the 5 stars! Great page.

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  4. "When I say Etrigan..." - killed me! Great gag!

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  5. "Your duty is to rhyme all of the time". Hilarious. Really fun page, Niel.

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  6. We have a winner. The concept seems so obvious (and we've had a similar entry this week) but this adds a lot of humour to the proceedings.

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