Why?
Because he’s “the smartest man on the planet”.
He
also happens to be a master strategist, world-class athlete and a martial arts
expert.
This
notion of hyper intelligence does however make him both a dream and a nightmare
character for a writer. On one
hand you get to explore a man who can achieve almost any goal you want or need
him to. The flip side is you have to somehow get into the head of a character
that is much smarter than anyone real could ever hope to be, and it is here
where the fun challenge of Adrian Veidt lies.
Ozymandias
is head strong, mentally capable and physically, well just better than
anyone. He is a man who sees
himself as an equivalent of Alexander the Great and Ramesses II but isn’t cocky
or over confident in his beliefs, he backs them up with his actions. He is a man
who is always a hundred moves ahead of the game. A man who knows you better
than you know yourself. A man who always sees the bigger picture.
So
what will you do with a man who will do anything for best of the human race?
Ozymandias – Sleep – Callum Ford
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¾ PAGE LENGTH
ADRIAN VEIDT now old, his golden hair given way to a light silver, his once handsome face wrinkled with age, stands in his ANTARCTIC COMPLEX viewing a wall of monitors that light up on otherwise dark room. He is dressed in a purple gown and slippers, as if ready for bed. His arms crossed and a look of concern on his face.
CAPTION 1
(Located at top left of the page. The box is coloured brown with a bronze edging)
- After all these years Adrian, how do you sleep at night?
CAPTION 2
(BOTTOM RIGHT OF PANEL, COLOURED PURPLE)
- Not very well, Daniel.
PANEL 2
WIDE PANEL AT BOTTOM
Close up on ADRIAN'S eyes, you can see the TV screens reflected in them, they are generally showing good news and promoting peace. However there is a look of anxiety in ADRIAN'S eyes, as if he's waiting for the entire thing to go wrong.
CAPTION 1
(Top RIGHT OF PANEL, COLOURED PURPLE)
- Not well at all.
Chillingly well done. I like the giant-sized panels used for dramatic effect.
DeleteI confess that I may have done something similar for my script this Friday, and wouldn't be surprised if others had too. The guy's got a lot of guilt.
Solid page, Callum. A nice look at what would probably occur if Adrian's plan was ultimately a success at the end of the story.
DeleteI have to confess I was going with a similar approach to my own script this week. You've gotten the guys guilt/burdens across in a short amount of space. Great work.
DeleteThis page highlights the old saying quality over quantity. In 2 panels you have conveyed some interesting insights into the character as well as asking some interesting questions about him, but you leave the answers up to the audience, great work.
DeleteI concur - 'brevity is the soul of wit', and what you've done here does far more in 2 panels than I've seen come out of a lot of scripts that use 5, 6, or more panels.
DeleteNice. Love the description on Panel 2.
DeleteNice. Love the description on Panel 2.
DeleteWow, that has just the right amount of foreboding to draw you in. Between Adrian going Howard Hughes and the only reference to Dan "Nite Owl" Dreiberg being that one caption box, we don't know if the voice is in the room, on speaker, or in his head. There is a heckuva lot of possibility here in just two panels. Sweet page.
ReplyDeleteAgain, thanks for the great comments guys!
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