Friday, September 7, 2012

Alfred - A Gentlemen's Gentlemen's Wager - Niel Jacoby

Panel 1: Alfred is dusting around the Batcave. The Bat-Computer screen shows an INCOMING MESSAGE

SFX: NANANANA-NANANANA

Panel 2: Alfred stands in front of the Bat-Computer, pressing a button.

SFX: NANANANA-NANAN-

Panel 3: Alfred is sitting in front of the Bat-Computer. His posture is proper as you'd expect.

Alfred: EDWIN! SO NICE TO HEAR FROM YOU.

Edwin(from Bat-Computer): YES, LIKEWISE. IT'S HAPPENING AGAIN ALFRED.

Panel 4: Alfred is shocked.

Alfred: OH MY! THERE'S BEEN SUCH A GAP, I HAD FEARED IT WASN'T GOING TO HAPPEN AGAIN.

Edwin: OH, IT IS. MISTER STARK'S HAD ME POLISHING HIS DRESS IRON FOR THE OCCASION.

Panel 5: Alfred is excited, but it's subtle. He's not exactly leaping into the air.

Alfred: MASTER BRUCE WILL BE GLAD TO HEAR THIS.

Edwin: YOU'RE FORGETTING SOMETHING, ALFIE BOY. WHAT ABOUT OUR USUAL ARRANGEMENT?

Alfred: OH, I HAVEN'T FORGOTTEN, EDDIE. ONE DOLLAR, SAME AS ALWAYS.

Panel 6: Alfred is walking away, looking through his money clip. He's smiling to himself.

Alfred: OH, THIS WON'T DO, NOT AT ALL. I'LL HAVE TO MAKE SURE TO BREAK A HUNDRED NEXT TIME I GO SHOPPING.

Edwin: I CAN HEAR YOU.

Alfred(whispering to himself): OH, I KNOW.

4 comments:

  1. I love this. You're right; it HAS been too long since the last big crossover, and I love the idea that this always goes on in the background. The "dress iron" line made me chuckle most, but I really like the Trading Places shout-out too.

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  2. Very cute, Niel. A fun look at how some of the background players would react to those crossovers. Also a pretty funny joke at the end.

    As well, I really enjoy the metatextual commentary you throw in here.

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  3. A fun page, littered with gags, from the opening sound effects, to the trading places reference. Great one and done.

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  4. Neat references, comedic tone and a nice piece of banter between the two principals. Good stuff!

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