Wednesday, September 19, 2012

Judge Anderson – Legacy – MK Stangeland Jr.


Judge Anderson – Legacy – MK Stangeland Jr.

(7 Panels)

Panel 1: JUDGE ANDERSON is standing with her younger clone, JUDGE ANDERS. JUDGE ANDERSON looks old, is wearing an instructor’s outfit instead of a JUDGE’s uniform, and is standing with the aid of a cane. JUDGE ANDERS looks like a very young JUDGE ANDERSON. No words are coming out of their mouths, but they are looking at each other as though they’re still having a conversation anyway.

Panel 2: JUDGE DREDD’s head as he looks on.

Panel 3: JUDGE ANDERSON and JUDGE ANDERS are seen from over JUDGE DREDD’s shoulder. JUDGE ANDERSON and JUDGE ANDERS have a hand on each others shoulders.

Panel 4: JUDGE ANDERS approaches JUDGE DREDD. She is in the process of putting her helmet on.

JUDGE DREDD: …

JUDGE ANDERS: (Interrupting Judge Dredd.) It’s because I’m her clone.

Panel 5: JUDGE DREDD looks like he’s attempting to say something else, but is a second time cut off.

JUDGE DREDD: …

JUDGE ANDERS: (Again interrupting.) You were going to say I look just like her.

JUDGE DREDD: …

JUDGE ANDERS: Psychic conversation. That’s also how I’m answering your questions before you ask them.

Panel 6: JUDGE DREDD does not look amused. JUDGE ANDERS looks apologetic.

JUDGE ANDERS (1): Sorry.

JUDGE ANDERS (2): Sir.

JUDGE DREDD: I don’t like people inside my head.

Panel 7: JUDGE DREDD looks at JUDGE ANDERS as they walk side by and points at her.

JUDGE DREDD: You may look like her, but so far you’re not acting like her.

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3 comments:

  1. Clever use of psychic abilities there, and a nice "This could be the beginning of a beautiful friendship" rookie/veteran dynamic.

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  2. Like J.D said this sets up a wonderful new dynamic with the added the quirk of Dredd always comparing the two. This could build into a great story arc.

    My only problem was Anders line 'Psychic conversation. That’s also how I’m answering your questions before you ask them' It felt a little clunky, and I feel you don't need it. Your visual story telling tell the reader the same information, and Dredds I don't like people inside my head line just confirms it. I'd drop The Psychic conversation line, as i feel it would keep the pace tighter on your other wise really god script.

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  3. Like Shaun says the psychic bit in the dialogue isn't needed. Dredd would already have picked up on it I imagine.

    Other than that this is a solid script which has the potential to pan out into something quite interesting story-wise.

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