Tuesday, September 18, 2012

Judge Anderson -Peace At Last- Dan Hill

As it's appropriate I purposefully tried to ape Wagner's style and formatting here.

PAGE ONE

All of the panels bar the last one are filled with disembodied balloons that almost crowd out the art.

1. CLOSE UP on a digital alarm clock going off on a bedside table. We’re in an apartment, bathed in shadow.

FX: BEEP BEEP BEEP BEEP

VOICE: --BREAKFAST, ANYWAY--

VOICE: --JUST ONE SUGAR--

VOICE: --TELL ME TO WAKE UP--

2. Fixed panel. A female hand from the left side of the panel slams down on the alarm clock.

FX: BEEP--

VOICE: --EVERY DAY WITH THIS--

VOICE: --I SAID WAKE UP!--

VOICE: --GONNA BE LATE--

3. Cut to Anderson in a small white, pristine bathroom. She looks into the bathroom mirror, brushing her teeth.

VOICE: --I’M ON TIME--

VOICE: --WE’LL SPEAK LATER--

VOICE: --I’M AWAKE!--

4. One of Anderson’s boots from her Judge uniform sits in the foreground of the panel as she pulls it on. In the background we can see a locker room.

VOICE: --DON’T FORGET--

VOICE: --I LOVE YOU--

VOICE: --YOU NEVER LISTEN--

5. Anderson, in full Judge uniform, rides towards us on her Lawmaster down the streets of Mega City One.

VOICE: --JUDGES ARE ALREADY THERE--

VOICE: --JUST ANOTHER RIOT--

VOICE: --SO TIRED OF THIS--

6. Tight on Anderson standing in the street with Dredd. Both of them are looking up at the block towering above them. Debris and missiles rain down towards them. In the background we can see other Judges and a cordon keeping out inquisitive civilians.

VOICE: --THEY’RE DOWN THERE--

VOICE: --I SEE ‘EM!--

VOICE: --GET READY--

CAPTION: FINALLY...

7. Wide panel. Tight on Anderson and Dredd as they burst through an apartment door somewhere high up in the block. Both of them have their Lawgiver's drawn and are firing wildly.

CAPTION: ...PEACE AT LAST.

FX: BLAM BLAM BLAM BLAM

3 comments:

  1. infinite bonus points for having seven panels, as Tharg himself would have desired it.

    That and it's a good script. Only qualms I'd have are little scripting niggles. Stuff like panel 2, where it's just a female hand, is non-specific enough that in an unlucky enough case an artist could completely bone that up and make it someone's hand other than originally intended.

    The voices skirt a similar issue but I'd assume an editor would have the sense to know what you're executing.

    Geez, that all sounded a bit over-critical. My main point is that it's still super-good and my fave of the ones up on the site so far.

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  2. Actually, I really enjoyed this one. Good "day in the life" type stuff.

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  3. Truly wonderful use of caption boxes to convey Andersons abilities, plus the crowded nature of them adds to the claustrophobic feeling Anderson is put under by her powers. Very nice work, as usual mate.

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