Thursday, October 25, 2012

Near Death – 50 Shades Of Grey – Shaun Richens.


PAGE TWENTY-ONE
4 PANELS.

LAYOUT
112
333
334

Set up Markham has been pulled into a situation involving the Mob trafficking woman into the country. We come in during the main confrontation between Markham and the Mob Boss, Vito Gacha.

1. We are in the office of VITO GACHA, the office has that kind of vibe. Vito Gacha lies on the floor; he is wearing a fine suit, white shirt, and black tie. His nose is bleeding from the punch MARKHAM gave him; some of the blood has splattered onto his crisp white shirt. Vito is on his back, using his arms to crawl away towards a cabinet. He is facing towards us, and Markham who is off panel.

VITO:
        What gives you the right to judge me? 
        You’re hands are covered in blood.

2. Same as panel 1. however Vito has crawled further away, his back up against the cabinet now. The shadow of Markham stretches out towards Vito not quite blocking him from the light yet.

VITO 1:
         I know the stuff you’ve done Markham.
         (LINK)
         VITO 2:
         Your past's as black as mine.

3. A worm’s eye view looking up at Markham. He is rim lit with the light behind him. He holds his pistol in hand outstretched pointing at Vito.

MARKHAM 1:
        My histories pretty dark.
        (LINK)
        MARKHAM 2:
        But compared to your its no worse than grey.

4.Insert panel in 3. Same as panel 2. However Vito has raised his hands to shield his face. Markham’s shadow covers Vito now.

         VITO 1: (SMALL FONT)
         Please
         (LINK)
         VITO 2:
         Don’t…


4 comments:

  1. Really fine build up of suspense, and flows neatly. Nice, clean script, Shaun.

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  2. This is short and snappy-- no drag on this chassis!

    Good page!

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  3. Thanks a lot guys. Wanted to keep things lean and tight this week as my script for next week has a lot going on. haha

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  4. Yeah, nice stuff here, Shaun. You quickly establish the scene and play it out in a quick and concise way. Thoroughly enjoyed it.

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