Friday, October 26, 2012

Near Death - Poison At 30,000 Feet - Niel Jacoby

Panel 1: Markham is walking down the aisle of an airplane, towards the back. We can see he's looking towards a sleeping enforcer-type (think Vin Diesel, or Michael Chiklis) who's in an aisle seat on the side of the plane at Markham's right, with a young, somewhat frightened girl in the window seat. Markham's right hand  is in his pocket, the other at his side. The enforcer has a glass of red wine in front of him.

NO COPY

Panel 2: Markham is passing by the enforcer's seat, and his hand is slipping out of his pocket.

Inset panel: a small pill drops into the enforcer's glass.

SFX(small): PLP

Enforcer(bubbly balloon, warped text): Zzzzz... Zzzzz

Inset panel: Close on the enforcer, turning his head, but still asleep.

Enforcer(jagged balloon): SNRK

Panel 3: Markham and the girl are staring at the enforcer, tense and startled..

NO COPY.

Panel 4: Close on the enforcer, drooling and asleep.

Enforcer(bubbly balloon, warped text): Zzzzz...Z....

Panel 5: Markham has his finger to his lips, and is winking to the girl.

Markham(small balloon, small text): sh.

Inset panel: the girl is winking back, smiling.

4 comments:

  1. Nice "silent" piece, with a deeper, unspoken subtext.

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  2. Very neat self contained story. Great choice of setting, it makes things very tense as if anything goes wrong he has nowhere to run. I love how silent and calm you play this all, with a touching beat to finish on. All in all well crafter page mate.

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  3. Nice choice of setting, Niel. Really enjoyed this silent page that still manages to clearly get everything across.

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  4. Echoing Grant's comment this is a great setting. There are a number of ways this one could play out.

    The page is stark and minimal (in all the best ways) letting the art do the heavy lifting-- all forward momentum and no drag.

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